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Fetus

I can feel myself growing
Glowing
Inside a world of petrified liquids
And remnants of other attempts
I can't breath by the nose
My shape is undefined
Second by second
Reproducing the same pattern
The same code
Cell by cell
Still without a core to beat
Gazing through the amniotic liquid
Your flesh feeding mine
As I intoxicate your body
I'm a parasite, I know
I am only existent because of your lust
You didn't care much
For the sake of your morbid desire
Is the taste of flesh on flesh in flesh
The messiah is allowing me to stay
Sucking your nutrients
Dissecting the awful feeling of loneliness
I bring with myself since I was conceived
You feel my violent shows
Yes, I hate you
I hate you for giving me life
I hate you for knowing your womb
Yet I still like it
A warm place
Safe from harm
Or at least I thought it was
As you (Censored) (Censored) wanted to get rid
Flesh of your flesh I am
And you commit suicide
Masochist
As I wonder
If that will allow me to see
The beautiful sky you look up at
When you'll find me some day

- Are you ready for this?
- Yes.
- Is this your first baby?
- Yes.
- I might kill both of you in this operation. Do you mind?
- No.
- Can you forgive me for killing a part of yourself?
- Yes.
- Are you REALLY sure you want to do this?
- Yes.
- Let's begin, then.

And then I realize
How unloved was I
Only a disturbance in your life
How much do you hate yourself?
That much for hating your own creation?
As my leg is ripped apart
Give me a shot
My tears and screaming can't even be heard
I, who was not even born
I, who didn't have an identity
No name, no place
Only a warm place to cuddle and cry
I wasn't even born for knowing
What is love and what is not
The blood drops out
Incinerating the dreams
Getting what I deserve
For my conception without love
Only a drop of semen
Procreating your biggest mistake
Rip my body apart, yes
Rip it fiercely
As you got a bill for my death
Not content with my presence?
Did you study the arts of life
For giving myself death?
The umbilical link is cut now
And the rotten ends of it
Both connected to destroyed humankind
But my body is now squished
The leftovers are as red as your period, surrogate
But with the taste of crime instead of innocence's
And mixed cells within
All put in a black bag
Thrown out to the disposal
Am I going to be loved by ravens
Or just maggots will cuddle against me
Eating me
Loving me for what I once was
Or for what I am now
The remnants of the art of life
Growth of a supplicant
Dead by its own mother
Now fertilizer
For the cycle of life
Good bye
Good bye
Good bye
Good...

Author notes

I don't know if it should be labeled as adult due to the topic.
I'm sorry for the length, but it's what I needed. About the family position, I give you the options. I'm male, 21, Kyo-N is my screenname... and I would accept anything but being your son, as I already have an AP mom (Lavender Butterfly).

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  • xxSomber Havocxx
    June 10

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    wow...very emotional and i culd visualize it so well...2 people i kno almost fell thru with one but after reading how it happens and everything they changed their minds. i really like this write. keep writing


  • stepbystep
    May 8
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    This is sooooo powerful and emotional.


  • SignifyingNothing
    April 20

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    This is very powerful. There are so many good lines in this but I think I like:

    Procreating your biggest mistake

    That is great and the bit with:

    All put in a black bag
    Thrown out to the disposal
    Am I going to be loved by ravens
    Or just maggots will cuddle against me
    Eating me
    Loving me for what I once was
    Or for what I am now
    The remnants of the art of life

    is just wonderful. A very emotional, powerful write you have here. Thanks for entering.


  • Black Narcissus gold member
    April 7
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    Very emotional write. Excellent poem.


  • cloe009
    December 3, 2008
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    it hurts me to know this kind of thing happens alot of the time


  • cloe009
    December 3, 2008
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    it hurts me to know this kind of thing happens alot of the time


  • Swan song gold member
    September 6, 2008
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    this was a very good rant good intense poem


  • ForeverLastingComa
    June 2, 2008

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    wow, that was very deep, my favorite lines were,

    "I am only existent because of your lust
    You didn't care much
    For the sake of your morbid desire
    Is the taste of flesh on flesh in flesh
    The messiah is allowing me to stay
    Sucking your nutrients
    Dissecting the awful feeling of loneliness
    I bring with myself since I was conceived
    You feel my violent shows
    Yes, I hate you"

    YOU LEFT ME SPEECHLESS!!
    thats a good thing...wow..the ending was beautiful,

    "Good bye
    Good bye
    Good bye
    Good... "

    Thank you for entering and good luck =)

    ~*ForeverLastingComa aka Leesha*~


  • DAMSELx
    June 1, 2008

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    Wow. Very emotional and moving piece. It is so blunt and honest and really has some amazing imagery.

    Thank you for your entry, this poem definitely stands out.
    Best of luck to you,
    --DAMSELx

  • wendymolly
    May 30, 2008

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    Possibly the most Original poem I have read in quite some time! The new perspective is nightmarish and very emotional to read, and for that your a finalist! Take care,
    ~pithyAplomb.


  • CountryCousin
    May 29, 2008

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    I think you said it pretty much.

    I think that you said it pretty much what the real truth is. The baby is torn apart and why? If a woman has sex then she should have used birth control. Maybe someday abortion will not be an option.


  • forever and ever
    May 21, 2008
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    this was really good. i'll let you know shortly and i won't make you my son. promise.


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    May 6, 2008
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    So very sad... to take anothers life is still being done by having an abortion, in my mind... I could never have an abortion, it would just hurt me too much as my baby would be part of me. It's sad that these little things don't get shown any love and don't get to know the worlds beauties as well as despairs.


  • 2lullabyhaven
    April 23, 2008

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    A nice poem, speaking volumes-Congrats on your gold. good luck, and sorry about the misunderstandinglol


  • Dorcha Runda
    April 19, 2008

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    Wow, how do you know this so well? This is just amazingly brilliant. I love it, its so very sad. You should use this for something against abortion. It's very good. Thanks for your entry and good luck.


  • Fourthaxis
    April 19, 2008
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    Wow!!

    Wow!! >at a loss for words<
    Wow!!
    Wow!!


  • Misery into Melody
    April 11, 2008
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    Made me tear up.
    Thank you <3


  • Fey Absinthe
    April 6, 2008
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    Morbid. Excurtiatingly morbid and realistic. I...I don't even have words to say aobut this poem. I don't even know how to feel, to act after ready this piece. An abortion from the fetus' point of view...this..is...the most shocking this I've read...in my entire carerr as a poet....

    Bravo. and good luck


  • Freestyle Bushido
    April 5, 2008

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    EXCELLENT!

    This is an amazing piece of work, so powerful, mysterious and true about the foundations and nature of life. Truly an excellent poem to marvel at, Thank you for entering and good luck too you in the contest.


  • Ms Raneika
    March 14, 2008

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    I thank you for entering my test. This is quite a unique poem.Thank you for sharing your emotions with me. Much love from Ranekia


  • Solace Angel
    March 5, 2008
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    wow this is really good! Good Job on getting the Gold! it makes me want to cry.


  • Momma Cupcake
    March 4, 2008

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    Can I say "HOLY CRAP?!"
    ....
    Can I comment later when I know what to say besides awe-inspiring and amazing?

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