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when we cannot sleep for the pain

 
 
 
 
 
a silence waters
the desperation of lonely,
 
strips a soul back
to before it was innocent
again,
before that second baptism-
in flesh and sweat
and the endless joins
that rain can seep into.
 
                 [ especially where there is love ]

 

when pain and longing

are the same, 

 
count the unique variety

of clouds,
 
and note that they,
like us, are all fluid
 
and, also notice

how they float
above the tears.
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

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  • NurseChilly gold member
    March 10, 2008

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    very humble and quite beautiful imagery here Katie.. such a sad refrain.... sometimes, we can all walk in the rain to hide our tears..


    many thanks for entering this contest

    G.x


  • Randomly Beautiful
    March 5, 2008
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    This is another great one. I am headed to add you to my favorites. I wish you the best in the contest. You should fare well.


  • Nicolette gold member
    March 5, 2008

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    Love your interpretation of the water theme here.... beautiful poetry.

    ~ Nicolette


  • Fug-azi
    March 5, 2008

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    There are some intriguing images in this, especially the reference in the second batism part .. I'm reading that as batism of sex.
    I like the allusion of clouds and humans being releated through water .. yep I guess I like all of it.


  • Night Hope gold member
    March 4, 2008

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    "strips a soul back
    to before it was innocent
    again"

    To where it was pristine, unsullied by the torrents of Mankind...What a beautifully yearning piece this is, my Friend. Good luck in Gill's contest, Sweetie. Wanda

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    March 4, 2008
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  • marc creamore
    March 4, 2008

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    This is so stunningly beautiful . . .

    "and note that they,
    like us, are all fluid"

    . . . absolute perfection!!!!!!!

  • Suzanne Dia
    March 4, 2008
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    it's herbal tea...

  • Suzanne Dia
    March 4, 2008
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