Acid rain,
cascading with black roses,
laying obscured in your cherry gore.
That now envelopes the fruitless sky,
upon this barren world,
bringing nothing but derision,
and repugnant obsidian penitence.
For the lives untold,
within these consecrated walls,
of the ancient's tormented crypt,
ensnared in the vampire’s realm.
Author notes
Prompt-dark
This was a random poem I thought of....
"imagery"
A contest entry
- ANYTHING SHORT by Blooming Poet.
400 points, ended March 7, 2008, 105 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Imagery by InMyFlames.
800 points, ended March 31, 2008, 13 entries
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Please critique my work if you feel this needs improving
Comments
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Oh my this is darkness within darkness. Nice imagery!
Thank you for entering.
Paul -
i love it! i agree with freakteen the last stanze was awesome, your start was average but good it built up the tension to the very end, thanks for entering
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great choice of words, great to see an extensive vocabulary
I love the last stanza. best of luck in the contest
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Wow, great wording here. Love the first stanza, cherry gore is very poettically said. Thanks for sharing.
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