She crys out for help
In a destuctive way
She trys to speak
But there's just too much to say,
Too much to say,
and too little time
She's walking to school
In the rain while she crys
Pouring down rain
As the tears fall from her eyes
Nobody hears her emotional crys
Going to school each day...
With fake smiles on her face
Mother asks how was skool
Girl just turns away
She closes her eyes
Just tryna forget
That she's here in this world,
That she even exist
Her hatradge is building
Her faith has collasped
Her hope is on lunch break
Strenghts taking a nap
They continue the screaming
And continue to fight
While she continues to self destruct
Attempts to take her own life
Does this sound right?
She hides behind fear
And cries tears of complete pain
As she walks all alone
While she cries in the rain...
Author notes
option 2
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this was sad, but effectively painted the mood to the persona, a few spelling errors, but all the same thannk you for your entry here
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Very good, i could feel the emotion and see the images.
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i really liked this, i could feel the emotiom in it.
keep writing -
Verry good
I felt the flow was a little forced in places but I captured the emotions really well
great write and with a little work it will be outstanding
well done -
I really liked how you repeated yourself...it made the poem realy dramatic. it was so good I love your style...you should fix some spelling though
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