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Sydney

Square-shouldered,
Smartly suited,
Straining skywards
To see past one another,
To take in the scene,
To get a good look,
To glimpse the water.

Some are close enough to wet their toes.

Clothed in dazzling mirrors
Stolen from a disco,
Or aging somberly in gray
And sitting this one out.

 

Bearing bright neon garlands,
Wearing bright neon circlets,

Sharing the harsh neon ambiance.

Pillars of society,
Monuments to industry,
Pinnacles of achievement.

Set in stone,
Built upon the rock,
Fostering offspring at the fringes
While sharing a smoke stack.

They'd probably laugh if they could
But instead they just hum.

Author notes

My assignment: to create a poem based on a painting of the buildings clustered at the edges of Sydney city harbor.

In a city where the preoccupation is real-estate and water views and creating a 'modern cityscape' does this poem suggest to you the increasing boxiness of the sprawling business district?

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  • words-n-stuff gold member
    March 4, 2008
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    WOW !

    loved it .... A subject very close to my heart ... Could be applied to any corporate development ANYWHERE in the world. Great use of imagery, metaphor, the WHOLE shooting match ! ... "Some are close enough to wet their toes" ... The last stanza is the killer for me "They'd probably laugh if they could
    But instead they just hum" .....
    Great Job !!!