Ducking and diving, lying and skiving
Avoiding the moment at which I must rise.
Warm and so cosy, fuzzy, still dozy
Not wanting the harshness of work to arrive.
Look at the timepiece, eating my warm peace
Yanking at me with a raucous alert.
Limbs feel so leaden, so can’t leave my bed then
Snoozing the minutes from nine until five.
Hearing the phone ring, makes my poor head ring,
Reaching I grab it and murmur hello.
The boss aint too happy, says make it snappy
Get there or I will have no place to go.
So after some striving, finally arriving,
I walk through the gates that I know oh so well.
Can’t think how I got there, to be honest I don’t care
Will just muddle through 'till I rest once again.
© Andrew Swain
March 2008
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I wrote this quickly, and have not "polished" it at all. Would welcome your feedback.
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This is a fun piece and boy can I relate. The rhyming is really solid and the rhythm had me almost singing. It's slightly unpolished (in my opinion) but I'm not sure how much I would think of changing as I kind of like it in its unpolished state.
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haha! I love this!! It is so true! I can really relate - I'm not a morning person, so I do the "alarm clock dodge" as well! The transition from dream world to work is done really well and effectively!! Kudos!
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It does not seem very unpolished to me at all. I thought this was a very decent write. I think you did well on this, nice write
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If this is unpolished I think you must be another Poe. I thought this was just amazing.
The story is one we can all relate to but you made the rhyme so good it just awed me. To think of writing a poem about this is so cool. Great job!
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TBH i never went back to this, but having read it again, its not too bad i guess
ty for commenting
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Well done
Good piece on the hum drum of life, very well written nice wordage and balance. I very much enjoyed reading this piece. Fine Piece!
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Thanks, I was getting ready for work and the fist line just popped into my head. A wise man once said "Find a job that you like and add five days to your week"
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Interestinf write on very common situation thhat most of us has to endure. You did it so well.Thanks for the comment.
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