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Time Will Tell

 

Buried deep within,
forgotten dreams unbroken.
Without time or meaning,
a silence softly spoken.

Peeling back the layers,
a beauty long concealed.
Moonbeams slowly dancing,
old stars are revealed.

A happiness reborn,
seeing through eyes anew.
A precious gift for many,
now in panoramic view.

Riding upon waves,
a friend you know well.
Blossomed into love?
Only time will tell.

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Prompt; Unknown crush contest

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  • TheClimb
    March 4, 2008

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    Wow, this piece was beautiful 'n I love the gentle flow that it has as well. Only time will tell....hmmm, so true!!!


  • VoltaicHypnosis gold member
    March 4, 2008

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    Lovely, sweet and like a calm midnight ocean.. I like this. My ideas? Get rid of the pink. Title's just fine - but maybe "Midnight Candles" or something. No, that's lame. You did great


  • Sf
    March 4, 2008

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    WOW!... I had a completely different story in my mind until I read the last stanza... BRILLIANT!...


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    March 4, 2008

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    Oh I just love it hunny!! Ahh the feeling of a crush on a friend and wondering if it may turn into love.

    Your wording was just lovely, great imagery and rhyme in this too!

    Sooo pretty! (what's happened to you lady of dark huh... anything I need to know ay )


    I'm crap with titles sorry.. but I actually like the one you've got