I drown
in the tangle
of a thousand wilted water lilies,
never wishing to surface
to an Earth
barren of your footprints;
I choke
in the twilight of yesterdays
rich, with warmth of our togetherness,
never wanting to inhale
air
devoid of your scent;
I sink
deeper to muddy pools
of frothing loneliness,
never hoping to float
in water
lacking your cleansing spirit;
I plunge
down my watery grave
whispering your name,
never longing to burn
in a fire
other than your lips....
Author notes
Prompt:
Option 7.
The absence of you
is never as barren
as when I comtemplate
half a shadow
screaming your name.
Whole Poem: http://allpoetry.com/poem/3974323
Also picture prompt,
http://www.deviantart.com/print/2767846/
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Comments
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Nicely penned. My only suggestion would be to maybe play with line breaks. Overall it was quite good.
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oh my!
You have turned a love poem into something much bigger than a love poem!
The remorse of the possibility of losing a loved one is almost tangible in this write.
Enjoyed it thoroughly - thank you for sharing
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Thanks for your wonderful comments and applause, glad you enjoyed the write.
Sunflower.
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