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I'll Rust In the Rain While You Swim In Your Moat.

 
 
 

I didn't look for you
In the still frame of pictures
Where we danced memory on.
A calm pause,
A .gif doesn't have a clue what composition
Your vibrant smile had
Or what fumes you  exhaled down my throat.

I didn't find you in the corner of
Elizabeth and Mills
Where we blew leaves up
To dress the sky
Where you said you saw dragons
Breaking down the doors of a castle.
"I'll save you, Princess. Hold still."
In the clouds
Everything was in the clouds.
I always wondered when you'd float back down.

I didn't look for you in that tower
Where you promised to rescue me.
Or that moat that you promised to cross.
You'd have been here by now
If self control would tie your laces,
To keep you from tripping in.
I'll throw you a life jacket.

They whispered behind my back about
The bottles you slept in
And what Chemical sex your tongue was fixated on.
Settle down.
I have finally found you,
Prince, I have become your knight.

"I love you" rescue banners
Could fizz in a champagne glass,
Tear your throat with dramatic claws
split you in half,
And your tongue
Was still too busy whoring itself -
Hands only too ready to feel up
Smooth flasks of lost identity
False security
Liquid impurity.
You're happy to forget my name.
Or settle for a whore.

It's easy to believe blindness
when you can convince yourself there's nothing to see..
I wish I had never found you at all.
Here.
I give up on knighthood.
Swords are too blunt for hands
That need to be rescued themselves.
I want my gown back.
I'll just wait in my already rusted tower.
Your clouds are raining...


One day you'll be found
On that bridge that leads to
A door you promised to walk through.
One day, when you're done
being inebriated with the moon
To welcome sun.
One day soon.

If soon would only be soon.
I wonder if towers disintegrate from age
Bury occupants in rage
with time.
I reckon so.
I can't float on clouds like you do
I hope you know.
 

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  • j-ay rose
    March 25, 2008
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    I particularly love the role reversal &&& basically everything about this.


  • pointlessdayz
    March 19, 2008
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    Oh wow. That was amazing! completely and utterly amazing.


  • Tenshi Asakura
    March 6, 2008

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    wow! that was awesome! i have waited for something good and wow this was great! from the first stanza to the end wow such amazing skill. this was worth the read. what could i say? i can pick one part of the poem i like its just pure amazement. the last stanza is what most stands out to me. just like the ending rhyme. keep up the great work! your doing an amazing job!


  • darell
    March 5, 2008

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    Incredible!

    This is a breathtaking piece that speaks
    to every emotion of love on so many levels.
    I am in awe at how skillfully you were able
    to express such complexed thoughts in such
    a simplistic way. There is so much depth
    to this poem. I believe it needs to be published.
    So many could benefit from its indepth truths.
    Thank you for openning your heart to us.
    I applaud your style and eloquence of expression.
    Bravo bravo bravo!


  • JT Sammer
    March 5, 2008

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    Excellent beautiful dear! I agree with Kirby, your weirdness came out but your to clever for those who don't know your weird to realize it was there. haha, I win, anyway loved the poem and I love you way more! Peace n' Love, American Hippies are the best, JT

  • Kalamina
    March 5, 2008

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    Very different, very interesting, i liked it. your description was original, the title caught my attention and the poem went a long with it really well!


  • kirbysman Moderators member
    March 4, 2008

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    Tee hee, told you before about this one. When your cleverness and your total weirdness combine, who knows what might result. Perhaps a unique [I use that word a lot with you] creation. This would certainly be one of those. "I can't float on cloud like you do." Hahaha, very nice ma'am, very nice.

    Grampapi

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