I look up at the sky
And I reach out for a star.
They seem a bit too distant,
But these days, most things are.
I stare outside my window
And I long to touch the grass.
But something separates us
Like a barricade of glass.
I'm stuck inside a nightmare
And I can't open my eyes.
The alarm won't sound for hours
I am trapped in the walls of my mind.
I hope some day the stars fall
And I hope the glass will break
And maybe my alarm will sound
So I can finally wake.
A contest entry
- Show me what you see outside your window. by copypastedelete.
300 points, ended April 4, 2008, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Whoa, this is an amazing write!
I hope some day the stars fall
And I hope the glass will break
And maybe my alarm will sound
So I can finally wake.
i luv this its very real, great job!
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OMG!!!
wow holly! that is beautiful!
~haley
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Wow. That was such an interesting poem. Well written, the flow was right on, the rhymes there but not forced, and imagery great. Congrats on the well-deserved gold.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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I love this. It is amazing.
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I love how the rhyming didn't seem too forced. Well done.
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this is a beautiful poem
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Your words flowed wonderfully on this piece. Every single word I read I can relate to. No wonder why you one a gold for this one! I love it!
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a wonderful poem, you clearly have talent, keep ritin x
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Great lil rhyme
good luck
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This is a truely beautiful piece,
I love it.
The rhyming is excellent and doesn't appear forced at all, infact the rhyme rather helps with the flow!
I love the final stanza, how it ties in with everything else! It's just so clever!
Well done, this is a brilliant poem. Goodluck in the contest you have entered!
Arc-En-Ciel--x
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DEEP! I like this poem! great job....
Hugs DEE
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