A grand water droplet, frozen midair
Transfixed, I stopped to stare
At its beautiful winking, I stood awed
Enchanting still-life piece paused
Out to break a hesitated fall, I reached
When sunray hit, time abided, it released
Into this hand and while cold as ice
My heart felt warmer... it was nice!
March 3rd 2008
- The Prompt Coffee House group list • next in list
A contest entry
- happy thinking by second-born.
500 points, ended April 1, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Interesting. Great imagery. I can see a girl and the frozen drop. Then the water as it slips between fingers as it dethaws. Awsome job. Thanks for sharing. UNT
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Great imagery. Such strong visual description that I felt like I was experiencing it all myself. Well done.
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When the sun hits you everything warms up ; things are brighter, lighter and look up, as you so aptly presented and stated in these lines. Easy to read and understand. Nice HM as well.
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You painted for me a beautiful image here. This was a beautiful poem to read. Keep up the good work.
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Unfrozen I am but I've also let the water droplet slip away~~~ thank u 4 the compliment <3
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wow...I loved how you've written this piece...good transition and such a lovely ending...thank you for sharing this specil happy thought of yours...
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And thank u for the shiny green
much appreciated <3
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Sweet Jesus... You can write!
A welcomed vision and a pure delight to read...
You move in grace... and your heart is free... when you write!
Brilliant and captivating piece...
I loved it...
~ James ~
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Thank you 4 the very sweet comment!
Alex
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Whatever life and love may have in store,
Two is always preferable to one.
Your graduation thus becomes my pleasure:
Your happiness is mine, a double treasure.
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Thank you, piece of treasure!
<3 Alex
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beauty baby. this makes me really think about the little things in life, such as the water droplet, and it helps me take my mind off of the bigger things that consume me. i really like the way this ended.. "it was nice!". you rock my world bby <3
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Thanx for actually understanding that I meant "it was nice" & wanted it to be the conclusion... just like that! It's my way of pointing out something essential but uncomplicated as life ought to be... simply "nice"
<3 ya right back!
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Hey, you did say "anything" but you're welcome & thanx for the honest take either way ^^
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This poem has a really amateur vibe to it, which is not what I'm looking for. Thanks for entering.
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Aww sis this is such a sweet write
Yes the heart can feel warmer and the feelings tingle
It is nice thats for sure
Much love to you
sis xx
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Aww sis this is such a sweet write
Yes the heart can feel warmer and the feelings tingle
It is nice thats for sure
Much love to you
sis xx
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Thank you X 2!!
much <3 to u too Big Sis...
Alex
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Beauitful, and sweet I enjoyed read theis i need to here something sweet thanks, :]
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Sure thang
TC<3 Alex
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