White tulip bends
Gusty winds bitter rage
breaks its long green stem~
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white tulip
under the wind
a broken stem
I like the visual, but to a haiku you have used too many adjectives. Best is always focus on one subject, one adjective and make it as compact as you can
Still a very nice imagery here.
Mari
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Beautiful Haiku, Susan, though I found it sad. I sure wasn't expecting to read that the stem broke.
Keep bending into that wind, Sweet Friend, and don't ever let it break you.
Sending love, light and prayer your way!
Kelly
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Beauty!!
Ooooooooooooooh this is a Gem Sis and Love the images You have brought forth~
No picture needed for this Haiku
but compliments Your words
The second line grabs~
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet Soul
Best wishes too Beautiful
and much love~ Desire~*~
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poor little flower.... 
It just doesnt seem fair when something so beautiful
gets broken. Loved the haiku sister.
Hope all is well with you
Delila
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I'm not really any kind of expert on Haiku but I thought this said a lot about nature and even people how they can break under pressure. maybe I'm reading too much into this.
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very lovely
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What a breathtaking haiku. I really don't know how to write them. MAybe if I read yours, I will learn. As bad as you feel, you still can write the best poems on nature! Feel better soon. You're always in my prayers. Best wishes in this contest.
and
Shana
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one thing i'm not good at is, is haikus, too long winded i guess... LOL...
good luck in the contest!
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Beautiful
Love the picture art, and your words that follow!
Thanks for sharing, I appreciate a good haiku!
Peace, Timothy
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Lovely
I have always loved how haikus are so visual with so few words. You have writen this very well. I could see the beautiful tulip swaying trying to stand strong against the wind then, finally, giving in to it's fate.
Very nicely done!
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Excellent write!!
So much in few words! Great job on the Haiku! Perfect pic combo too! Don
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A beathtaking haiku. You write such wonderful nature poetry, always. This one makes me yearn for more flowers in springtime's basket of surprises.
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You paint a beautful, yet tragic, scene. I hope the long green stem is not a metaphor for your will; let nothing bend your will nor shake your faith.
I hope you start feeling better soon.
Hugs and kisses,
Brazos
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A nice haiku, Sis, and complimented by a lovely picture.
I wish you the best of luck in the contest
luv and
Dee
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Very Nice Haiku, Sis! Good Luck in the contest!
Love Ya!
♥ Maureen
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Nice haiku sis. You capture the beauty and the harshness of nature in this one.
Best of luck in the contest.
Love & Hugs,
Jeannette
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nice
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Wow an emotional haiku. You've created something that gives a angry and sad feeling in just a few words.
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Excellent
Oh my sis, for a haiku you outdid yourself. Great job. Best of luck in the contest.
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another very good KU, these are the best short forms that i see out of all the others, good luck in this contest.moons
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I like this.
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