I look out the window,
the rain matching my tears.
I look out the window,
knowing that I'm worthless in your eyes.
I look out the window,
wishing I didn't have to see you again.
I look out the window,
willing myself to leave you.
I look out the window,
deciding not to live for another day.
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Comments
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I'm not too fond of the repition, but in spite of that I believe it is still an excellent poem. Great job [=
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I liked it, that is what poetry is all about, how you feel and at that very moment when you typed this was in honest of your feelings. Great job and keep writing.
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I disagre with the others. I believe the repetition is what makes this great. I love this. Very good work.
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I liked it but yet I didn't. Personaly i think the reptitive part is what makes it flow, but this also a very touchy subject for me. It wasn't your best but I definatly wasn't bad I liked it. A little too depressing for me but even if you don't like the topic a good poem is still a good poem and that dosn't change. Good work buddy old pal =)
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I didn't really like it. The repeting line ruened it.
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I liked it, the only thing i am not the biggest fan of is the repetition of "I look out the window" I would change it to something like, I look out the window, I stare out the window, I gaze out the window, etc. Thats just me though. All in all, a beautifully written poem.
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