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Fetal Position

sigh
gasp
cry
and
breathe

Baby what did I ever do to you
to make you lose your faith in me

like a child
I sit below their feet
because I feel as if I am not worthy
not strong enough to stand

nothing to hold
without your hand
I'm falling like dead leaves
what a harsh October

rocking to the beat that's gone missing
as if it will write me a love song.

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  • Viva La Vie Boheme
    March 4, 2008
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    I like it! I like the metaphor and the way you ended it and your style. Good write!