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Useless inches

In inches of sharp razor
She found psychosis savored
though there exists no laser
to dissect pain's harsh flavor

Nor are golden gasps uttered
on discovery of flow
from broken vessels stuttered
by whispers She does not know

A contest entry

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  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    March 4, 2008

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    powerful dark and kind of scary aswell but then you were always able to write about anything. well done bro


  • Tattboyspet
    March 3, 2008

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    hmmmm ... your rhyming works in this one (I'm USELESS at the rhyming ones ~shaking head~ I embarrass myself!)
    The vampiric feel to this was really good as well - yep - I did enjoy this one


  • Lost Vampyre Angel
    March 3, 2008
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    this is a really good poem,
    it shows raw emotion,
    good luck in the contest,
    love vamp xxx