My gaze sweeps down from on this cloud,
To trees and fields and rivers blue,
The sight, pristine, God has allowed,
My lofty home, I'm born anew.
As leaves turn shades of red and gold,
And creatures small and great draw near,
The perfect balance I uphold,
For I'm the only man up here.
Hereon my porch two ravens nest,
And crickets chirp throughout the night,
The calming stir of dawn's request,
Is brought to life, this soothing sight.
Author notes
It's been a while... I hope I can keep it going...
A contest entry
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wonderful
i can picture this place so perfectly , your definalty on the right track , i could close my eyes and have this read to me and and ddrift away on the breeze hoping to land in a place of such calmness and purity as you have discribed here
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Hoodwinked
Magnificient
M still speehless after reading it twice, maybe this one is worth more than words 
So very glad I came across this~ Great one poet!
You have been hoodwinked by the Poetic Bandits!
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Hoodwinked
I have to agree with Takayuki, you have such a beautiful style. It flowed so well. Keep writing and pouring your heart out. -
Hood-Wink!
Hey, you have a beautiful writing style! I love the imagery in this, it gives such a wonderful vivid picture! BTW, I noticed on your page you like Amy Lee, I'm also an aspiring vocalist and she's my muse as well! How cool! Hope all is well. Keep your head up and your gaze will follow!
~Takayuki~
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HOODWINKED !
YES! Don't stop now! The rhyme is tight and the imagery delightful! I can picture this scene in my minds eye...Beautiful! Thanks for sharing this vision!
You have been Hoodwinked by the Poetic Bandits today because WE CARE!
Dennis
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