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Loneliness is a two edged sword that slices through the heart,
for a heart without another to love is stopped awaiting to start.
Dejected nights of despairing dreams, fantasies of fervent flesh,
enveloping body and soul, optimistic thoughts for forever fresh.
For the deep depths of despair, degrade and damage the mind,
oblivion the poignant reward, so often the innocent sadly find.
The struggle smothers silent screams, of a solitary voice at night,
for only those lonely hearts can know the feelings from the fight.
And when the sorrow has turned to despair and hope finally dies,
then the fantasies into reality come and silence despondent cries.
Then passion or love mends the hearts and heal all sweltering scars,
for love blooms in many vivid ways, a chandelier of shining stars.
So waiting is worth the endured pain, as reward for a wistful wait,
and welcomed at last finally, is the new found fickle finger of fate.
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Option 7
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A contest entry
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this is so good! i love the hopeful feel to it. thankyou so much for entering and good luck!
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So emotionally heart felt
I could feel your yearning for a loved one here Mr. Bazza. I too miss My Isa while away from here and know how much it is to have her by my side. Exceptional write.
As always well done.
~Ron~
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nice.
I like the couplette organization with the stanzas. nice work. Thank you for entering the contest and good luck. -
yes despair and hyope are how i felt too
great poem
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I must say, I love the circle of life illustrated here...not just another sad poem, you know?
Then passion or love mends the hearts and heal all sweltering scars,
for love blooms in many vivid ways, a chandelier of shining stars.
My favorite lines of this particular piece, and true in so many ways...Bravo indeed!!
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ah the tale of the lonely heart vg ending good alliteration/assonances with the f's vg opening lines title good fits but so-so thanks for sharing regards zaj
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Great Imagery!
I love the metaphors that you used, very strong imagery! -
Written well.
This takes you from despair to hope. The lines building to show that loneliness need not be. I especially think the last two lines summed it up.
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You're a bloke reborn these days, Bazza.
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very nice
bazza this is so very true of many a lonely heart lots of us go looking for love and never find it, its when we don't look that it's often found very well written have a great day
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Sounds as if the one who waited has finally been rewarded with love. Well done Bazza. You always write such perky moving poems and with a message attached of hope.
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"So waiting is worth the endured pain, as reward for a wistful wait,
and welcomed at last finally, is the new found fickle finger of fate..."
Indeed it is my friend!
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A beautifully written piece of poetry. Great depth. A pleasure to read. I think you did a great job. Nice.
Kelli
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