My quill rest
just above the page
the ink desperate to stain
crisp linen to spoil
for just the right words
it’s sole campaign
Graphing a sequence
sincerely sublime
upon its quarry
an account rendered
slightly slanted
in all its humbled glory
For the reader of the writer
it must attend and beguile
a second glance
from these determinations
there is only
one passing chance
In a list
A contest entry
- Write as your muse inspires~! by Demington.
550 points, ended March 17, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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An interesting propostion.
In line 1 "rest" should be "rests" unless you are talking about more than one quill.
Don't use "it" or "it's" in poetry unless you absolutely must. Such a word is quite boring. For example, line 6 was distracting while line 9 was good ("it/its" is a tough task to handle).
Always read through your work to make sure it flows and does not hurt itself with confusing language. Overall I think you've done well to avoid such snags.
I would find a different title. Make it something that is unique, mysterious...perhaps a little vague. Sometimes it helps to have the reader wondering about the title even after they've read the poem. Though your poem seems draw geavily upon the title. Just a thought.
Blessings,
C
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Great write
Ah we as the writers of time so often hoover over the page in disire and the knowing the muse will come then we are off to a new adventure
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