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Shattered Dreams

She lives a life of a broken heart and shattered dreams.

Where emptiness is full and sadness reigns supreme.

Where memories never fade and they refuse to diminish.

Where the marathon she runs, has no finish.

Her life just spins around and around.

A life of circles with no ending to be found.

She lost the one person who gave her inspiration.

A reason to travel with no expectations.

They traveled a journey, side by side.

Until that night he just up and died.

Her life became a course that she didn't expect to have to run.

Not without the man who would make the journey fun.

He said that he'd be there until their dying day.

Never did she think that it would happen this way.

A life cut short with no more marathon to run.

All because of a man with a fully loaded gun.

Now her journey is traveled with reflections.

Memories of the man who she shared her connections.

A broken heart and shattered dreams.

She still hears the sound of his dying screams.






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MY VOTE...The Wreck of the St. Marie

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  • Xtianor
    June 28, 2008

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    This is one of the nicest poems i read around here. Full of deep emotions and a flow running from line to line to make that scene in my mind! Wonderful poem, surely deserved all the awards.


  • FlipperSwitch
    May 11, 2008

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    Excellent way to portray how one can so easily connect themselves to someone...and how easily that connection can be what destroys you if it's broken. Thank you for entering.


  • Three Doves
    May 7, 2008

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    Well well I will not let the previous Gold keep me from voting Gold for you in this contest. A Fantastic Write and most deserving. Gold for sure.
    Peace in light and love.
    Noah


  • jamiedoring
    May 6, 2008

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    Great write....I love a well rhymed poem that that tells a story, you did a fantastic job on this.


  • crazymomma
    April 30, 2008

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    Powerful poem. I can really feel your pain through your words. Great poem. Good luck in the contest.


  • TabbyCat
    April 25, 2008
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    Sad... Tragedy can strike when we least expect it.

  • celadia
    April 23, 2008

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    Oh God, how awful a thing to have happened, but this is one wonderful poem. Good luck in the contest.


  • Charity Ann
    April 21, 2008

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    Wow...I see why this won gold. It is beautiful and moving. And I was thinking they were an old married couple but then I find that he was taken away in a senseless manor. Wow!! I also liked your rhyme...which is harder to do by the way, and even harder to do well. I love this piece. Good luck.


  • broken-colours
    April 19, 2008
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    This was a beautifully penned, although very sad, poem. A sense of melancholy floats over the reader with every word. And you made it rhyming wonderfully; there was probably only one place where it sounded a bit forced. Thanks for entering and good luck!


  • Swan song gold member
    April 9, 2008

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    Very very smooth poetically and very very sad. tone was slow which is good because this is a sad poem. wording was simple and easy to understand which i think for poems such as this is important,


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    April 5, 2008

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    OMG~~~ WoW What a excellent write this is.
    This story sent chill down my spine.
    I think this maybe one of the best pieces I
    have ever read.
    You should enter this in 100 more contests,
    and win like a 100 more trophies, because that's
    just how good I think this is.
    Loveandblessings2u & yours always
    Joyce


  • mannyz143
    April 2, 2008

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    A gorgeous write. It flowed so smoothly and well and it held my interest from beginning to end. Keeps you well intrigued. I loved the emotion that i felt flowing from it. A great way to get the pain out from a love lost.


  • SuicidalLover
    April 1, 2008

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    This is such a great write. It reads so easy and take you on a journey of the mind. I like this. Also congrats on the win.


  • Heavens Child
    March 31, 2008

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    Congrats on your gold trophy. You've expressed your deep pain of this loss with such great intensity that it keeps the reader engaged from beginning to end. My favorite lines are 3 and 4.


  • pinkink
    March 31, 2008
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    Amazing

    The emotion just jumps off the page. Great write!


  • love-is-hell
    March 30, 2008
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    This is really a good poem. Very good job. very sad with a lot of emotion behind it


  • Angel Wings1960
    March 30, 2008
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    TEARS

    So sad, I cried while reading this.


  • joelegy
    March 30, 2008

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    hey uncle
    AMAZING poem.
    its sooo sad tho.

    especially the last line!!
    but its sooo good!

    - imperfections


  • Nobody Important
    March 30, 2008
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    thats an insanely good poem


  • Pandorea
    March 30, 2008
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    that is so sad. that's really all i can say.


  • Serene
    March 30, 2008

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    And it holds a gold, emotions penned are etched so beautifully and vividly with these SHATTERED DREAMS penned so poignanntly real, exceptionally written!!

    Rena


  • MotorcycleFreak silver member
    March 30, 2008

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    Wow!

    What a beautiful and sad poem. It simply flows with sadness and despair. The word choice creates an immediate reel that starts in the reader's mind and sadly it ends. Great Write! ~Peace~Gar


  • pantress silver member
    March 30, 2008

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    We never know when it is going to happen, but it will happen, regardless. Death is before us all, and waiting patiently. Very good write. Congradulations on the gold


  • Patpowers silver member
    March 30, 2008

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    You penned a very well meant poem. Emotional to the core. Congratulations on the contest! You deserved it. THANKS!


  • Anannya
    March 30, 2008
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    this poem is really a wonderful and touching poem.i was in search of a poem like this.


  • Blooming Poet
    March 25, 2008
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    This sounds like me.
    and that is not a good thing. Ohh no. Seerriously I have been through somethting alomst exact to this. I love this part:


    Where memories never fade and they refuse to diminish.

    Where the marathon she runs, has no finish.

    Her life just spins around and around.

    A life of circles with no ending to be found.



  • LadyDementia gold member
    March 15, 2008

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    Outstanding Poem!

    This is so full of sorrow yet beautifully written. The emotions here are so deep I felt I was travelling with her through the pain. Things like this are becoming all to common these days, sometimes this can be an awfully cruel world. Superbly penned hunni

  • JWGoethe
    March 5, 2008
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    It is better to have loved and lost...
    whoever said that never lost, I'll bet. Nicely done.


  • TheClimb
    March 4, 2008

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    Gosh, I feel for the woman/girl in this poem right now....my heart is aching on account of her loss. Sounds like she finally found the one 'n then he was taken away...gosh that's sad! , I hope she'll be ok 'n be able to stand alone some day....


  • Forgotten-blue-eyes
    March 4, 2008

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    This is written extremely well. It kept me hooked all the way through. The sadness of her losing the man she loved came through your words and into my heart. Well done!


  • Ephiphany
    March 4, 2008

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    Intersting poem,

    I enjoy your journey very vivid in what you speak. Good luck and thanks for sharing.

    E♥


  • secberm
    March 3, 2008

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    Excellently done, brother. A somber poem. What insipred this? Imagination I hope. I take it you live in the Bronx huh? You wanna be hardcore and grimey huh? Talk about skreet lyfe huh? You supposed to be my funny man. You supposed to crack with the funnies man. Where's the funnies?

    Seriously man... Well done. Easy flow. Never saw this side of you. One.

    Dez


    • pappacass
      March 4, 2008
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      the bronx no...lol

      have grown up in the city though...projects born and raised...hardcore was like brushing my teeth...everyday thing...i just moved on to bigger and better things my man


  • albymyheart gold member
    March 3, 2008

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    Wow! I love this. So heartfelt. You really do express a huge range of life's emotions within your poetry. It is like you can see from within every human aspect. Well done my friend
    alby


  • frownsnfreckles
    March 3, 2008

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    some very poignant lines in this, I particularly liked
    'a life of circles with no ending to be found' Personally I think it would have been more profound if it had finished after 'around and around' or 'side by side' The impact seemed to lie in her inner feelings rather than the need to tell the story that followed


  • Anemone-Rose
    March 3, 2008

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    wow beautiful, simply beautiful, mainly because i can relate to most of the poem but still well done!

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    March 3, 2008

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    The title is an apt introduction and acts as a summary. The black and white presentation makes a sublimilal statement that this is the black and white of reality. The rhyme is freeflowing, simple but effective. NB deminish/perhaps diminish.
    The author notes ask for the readers thoughts on this topic, I can vouch that grief never ends, that true love never ends, that the gun is a weapon of mass destruction, for every individual it kills it permanently wounds that persons partner, family and friends.
    A poignant poem which touches on the void, the vacuum felt by those that walk with the screams in their ears whether awake or asleep and pray for peace of mind and a mind full of peace and who wait with faith in their heart that they will meet again at St. Peters Gate.

  • Blooming Poet
    March 3, 2008

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    This poem displays a very painful story, love hurts sometimes, but to me this poem goes beyond the pain love evokes by adding the pain of death. Very creative, very poetic. I love the intensity of sadness here.


  • Luckintheshadows
    March 3, 2008

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    WOW

    this was an incredible read, your rhyme, and rhythm are excellent. The pain, and uncertainty really comes through strongly, the sense of loss is profound. Thank you for sharing,
    Luck.


  • jcat gold member
    March 3, 2008

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    WOW!!!! Now this was an incredibley moving piece!! I truly am in awe of your serious side here Shawn!!! Very well done, broke my heart

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