So many loved ones around me,
yet I'm isolated by the pain.
Left hollowed by this emptiness,
I'm crying inside.
Joyce Le Lievre
(sunny day)
© Joyce A. Le Lievre, All Rights Reserved
March 3, 2008
Author notes
Prompt: Loneliness
In a list
A contest entry
- . by Aurora Ceres.
475 points, ended March 4, 2008, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Quickie Prewrites by CitrineSunrise.
900 points, ended March 10, 2008, 13 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Great
So few words yet it says so much. I always love reading your poetry.
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Jennifer, Thank you for the applauses and your lovely words of praise as always for me. It is hard to get out in twenty words without using the prompt word what it actually says. We have to really look inside and then think outside of that box. I'm very happy that this one spoke to you. Love ya my friend, Joyce
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loverly ... well done on gold...
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comrade, Thank you for the applause and your loverly words of praise for me here. I'm very happy that you enjoyed. Love and God bless, Joyce
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JOYCE!!! Congrats on the Gold! I'm so happy that this won!
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I was shocked when I saw it. You do know how beautiful your entry was.
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Such pain and emotion. I got the feeling a loved one had passed away and these are your thoughts. "Hope this is fiction".
Love,
Amera
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By the way, nice background. What lovely eyes the girl has! Hazel...pretty pretty!
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Wow, people like me tear their hair out wondering what on earth could be written about this propmt and here you are summing up such a vast thing so beautifully in four lines! This is a perfect portrayal of a lonely, anguished soul. Wonderfully penned, Joyce. Good luck for the contest.
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so sad yet so to the point
so many people all around yet we can still feel like
we are completly alone.
Excelent write my friend
Hugzz fire
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