death aside
no lies to hide
wishing you were close to wipe
the tears i cry..
no where to run, no where to hide
i only want to die..
so let me be
all alone
go away and never return.
death aside
no lies to hide
wishing you were close to wipe
the tears i cry..
no where to run. no where to hide
i only want to die..
so good bye...
shrot and sweet..... i like it
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I love the simplicity of this, awesome job. A very sad piece but the emotions have been conveyed well. Flow is excellent, superbly penned hunni
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AMAZINGNESS
i like this poem, it makes me thing of all the time i had to sit there and wish he was wiping my tears away. -
The flow is amazing. A bit short, but hey some of the best stuff is. What I am basically saying is that it worked so good that I just craved more. Keep up te good work.
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the rhythm and rhyme were very smooth in this piece and made for a very nice read. sad and deep read here, very relateable, thanks for sharing!
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You did a very nice job on this. The structure was amazing. Good work.
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hey
thanks.. it just comes to me...
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with a good weekend like that how can you think about this kind of stuff....... now i thought it was really really good..... come on you know it was but anyways it is still a good write
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hey
i did have a wonderful weekend and you did to
but it just came to me..
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