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A Bitter Taste

Her skin shimmers
as she curls in her chair,
brushes back her hair
like a mermaid's,
and I, awake, see
lithe beauty mirrored.

She, aware, dims her lamp,
sighs, slips to the bed.
I draw covers over -

breathe her skin's fragrance,
kiss through spill of her hair.

She smiles for intimacy,
flexes her fingers
elegant and strong -
a ballerina's gesture
as if she'd drifted
from a danseur
to pirouette in dreams.

There, hideous monsters
claw close to her heart ...
pounding ... and I feel it
pulse out her fears.
I draw horror from her,
she, awake in my arms,
I, moist from her tears

break knots of nightmare
from hands unclenching in mine
and, warming her body,
draw her in

and there she sleeps
deep in our embrace -
sweet breath of love;
sweet calm of face;
a flower caught, falling.

 

It is a bitter thing

when the womb is dry,

to drift from sleep

into sweetness of love:

a bitter taste to swallow,

a difficult tomorrow.

 

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The 'I' of this poem is a persona.

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  • Dienush
    March 7, 2008

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    Hmmmm. I thought I've commented this... :-? Odd. Anyway, here's an applause because I really liked it.


  • Dienush
    March 7, 2008
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    Wow, the images in this poem and the contrast between them are really powerful and real. I like the alliterations, imagery, metaphors, and the way you made it so true by mixing in the wonderful and the despicable. Very nice. Thank you for your entry.

    ~Diana


  • maa gold member
    March 4, 2008

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    a deeply moving verse ...
    strong feelings painted with gentleness and mastery ...
    I am sure more than one reader will resonate with your sensitive words and face his/her own fears, if willing to ... presence and consciousness shall dissolve them ...

    thank you for sharing your heart,

    maa


  • klassy lassy
    March 3, 2008

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    A waking dream? Such sadness and anxiety come through the imagery you so adeptly paint, as if promises are broken before they ever take wing. The intimacy, though, is beautiful, tender, in the pain and comfort shared. We should all be so lucky as to have loving arms to enfold us when monsters rear their ugly heads.

    Like Margaret, this one settles deeply and I find my eyes brimming.


  • frownsnfreckles
    March 3, 2008

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    'a flower caught falling'
    what a beautiful& poignant description of such fragility.
    A poem of much insight and sensitivity where vulnerability is shared and not questioned or chided.


  • MargaretG
    March 3, 2008

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    I have seen those "hideous monsters", and there is nothing to do about them but live on with courage. Anxiety is a normal response to fear that does not abate; there is no comfort to give, except to listen.
    Your poem gave my throat a lump and my eyes tears. Knowledge is not always a blessing, "a difficult tomorrow". You gave the poem a lot of emotional presence, well done and good luck.

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