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When You've Lost Everything

Have you ever felt a desperate wind?
The one that steals your breath?
Has it surrounded you
And enticed you under,
Into hellish ecstacy?
Have you ever forgotten
How to live,
And find your peace again?

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  • Exodus gold member
    March 19, 2008

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    Honestly I think this could have done without the second "have you ever" and just left it shorter. Other than that I think you had some great language choices in here.

    Thank you


  • Anti-Saint
    March 4, 2008
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    yes, yes, yes, and yes. wonderful but short. very much to the point. i love it.