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erotic couples

erotic couples
busily
engage
in tantric teachings
fervently join
in theorems
others don’t see/feel
mouthings 
of souls taught sharing

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erotic couples

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  • Perfectly Imperfect
    March 4, 2008

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    Very good imagery in few short words I like the last lines best. Well done and thanks for entering x

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    March 3, 2008

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    Mmmmm, I see the duality, tantra should be anything except fervent/busy so if couples are racing through the teachings they have failed themselves and their partner and not their teacher per se.

    • Zyskandar A Jaimot
      March 3, 2008
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      ah those 'tantric couples' can sure GET IT ON much thanks for the read/comments regards zaj


  • golddust13
    March 3, 2008
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    Different flow, but i like it... nicely done

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