Thrust into a world so very black,
words were cast, no turning back.
Body slammed, hit with shock,
time halts, no tick, no tock.
Fragile heart is fractured, broken,
love now flown has left its token.
Within the void emptiness seeps,
mind is lost to a pain so deep.
Eyes tremble at memories inside,
body shakes as agony divides.
No more colours pass you by,
shades of grey is all you cry.
Falling swiftly into the abyss,
where only turmoil thoughts exist.
Longing just to feel one last touch,
or hear the voice you miss so much.
Torment boils and does blister,
as envy begins to softly whisper.
Knowing he will find someone new,
leaving you sobbing, broken in two.
Author notes
Prompt; Goodbyes...I want them.
Goodbyes are lullabies
A contest entry
- Goodbyes, Are Lullabys by Clinging-to-Life.
900 points, ended April 10, 2008, 22 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything Goes.......But it has to have emotion by Nikki Rowles.
450 points, ended March 17, 2008, 70 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I like it
I can relate to it it's really good -
Beautifully written...I love the flow and the rhyme of this and like many of the other entries, I can relate too well. Thank you for following my rules and i wish u the best of luck.
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The pain is definitely here, there is no doubting that! I can feel it and I can see it as well...you always do an amazing job of helping your readers see exactly what you mean with your words---tis a skill I greatly admire.
That line: Body slammed, hit with shock...
I felt as though I was there 'n I could definitely see it in my head. Amazing job auntie!
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Body slammed, hit with shock,
time halts, no tick, no tock...
I've fallen in love with this... ITS GREAT!!!!!!!!!!
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wow... so sad. A lovely, sad write. Good work
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nicely said
broken relationships can be so painful....well, not for me....lol
loved this my sis
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O good lord you I need a tissue(sniff)
girl you are either scary the hell out
of me or making me cry!
I can't take it anymore! lol
Love this!
~Pastel
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Aww that's sad hunny!!! Dark and sad!
Broken hearted and still loving the person.. torture knowing they will be with someone new!!!!
Sigh.. yep, felt it !
You're just brilliant you know!!!
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