Incandescent wings,
magnify auburn sunset;
distracting my lens.
Author notes
Puiture Inspiration
"This is a great form of poetry
that flows from my thoughts,
though the picture I see is greater,
I have summed it all up beautifully in such short verse."
Edited : 16/03/08 - Correction On Syllable Count
A contest entry
- Haiku by InBetweenThoughts, all welcome by InBetweenThoughts.
600 points, ended April 12, 2008, 45 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Thank you so much for your Haiku
I appreciate your entry... All counts are good, good form,and authors notes, thank you..best wishes, Ken IBT
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Hello there. You have painted a awesome picture with your words. I'm not positive I've counted it well, but it seems to me that you have too many syllables. The host has asked for haiku in the 5/7/5 form and in yours I count it as 5/8/6.
I think you're allowed to change your haiku to comply with the rules.
Have a gr8 day,
BJ.
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Beautiful!
A Haiku is something I have never attempted, but you write them with perfection, Bro...
This is amazing!
Lynda
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You really have summed it up perfectally my dear friend. This is a wonderful piece!!! The border is great with it as well.
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wow i love the haiku that you have penned uncle it captures alot with your words and it is strong well done
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