Pain stinging,
abuse eroding self-respect..
Caught too deep, in
black crevasse
called You.
Author notes
13 words, "In too deep"
A contest entry
- 13 ~ 13 by Lavender Butterfly.
390 points, ended March 3, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Deeply dark and sadly expressive... x
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I hate it when the pain stings..that is for sure when you know that you've gone way to deep in something...
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Yup.. I see the meaning you have absorbed from the poem... I was trying to convey the feelings of an abuse victim here, who is trapped by her abuser. The stinging pain is both physical and mental, and while abuse slowly erodes her self-respect, she drowns deeper and deeper in the black crevasse that is him. That was the idea. Thanks for taking the time to read my work and comment, much appreciated.
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You're very much welcome. I am slowly learning to interpert certain meanings when they are used in poems as I did here. That gave it great impact and metaphor.
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A poem means different things to different people, isn't that the very beauty of it? Thanks for stopping by again, each comment is important to me
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