A heart of gold stopped beating
two shining eyes at rest
god broke our hearts to prove to us
he only takes the best
A million times we'll cry
If love could of saved you
you never would of died
It broke our hearts to lose you
But you didnt go alone
For part of us went with you
The day god took you home
A contest entry
- March New Members contest by AP Greeters.
600 points, ended April 8, 2008, 64 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Welcome to allpoetry and thanks for entering!
Wow.. just wow. I am sitting here and this has touched me so dearly.. and made my heart stop and my breathing catch. The rhyme is beautiful and the sentiment even more so..
Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest
I hope you enjoy allpoetry
Faerie
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Thank you for your entry and Welcome to Allpoetry
To loose your grandparents is never an easy thing. My grandmother died when I was 8 I really didn't understand much at the time, but I was so sad still. My only suggestion is that God should be capitalized. Otherwise good flow and structure. Thanks for sharing.
I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy
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would of -- would have (or 'would've). 'would of' makes no sense.
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one of the best
It is a wonderful poem, it toches the hart most deeply. Keep writing. -
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that is so sweet. yuor really good.
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Welcome to AllPoetry
A most sad write that touches the heart deeply; I am sorry for your loss but I know she is adoring this write from Heaven
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Thank you for your entry
Best of luck
Stay safe
~Manda
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Welcome to AllPoetry
This is so very sad... You have shown both the terrible grief and the memory of happy times. This little poem is bittersweet and heartbreaking. Good luck in the contest.
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that was beautiful
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that was so beautiful.. It touched my heart and i will be back to read your work!
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Bah, shed a tear there. Love it - stunned.
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Nebilim
thanks so much for commentimg my poem im glad u liked it
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Oh what a truly sad poem.I know Grandmothers are the best and to lose one is heartbreaking.
A beautifully expressive entry. Thank you so much for sharing
Gaylene
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Alice
thanks for the comment im glad u liked my poem..
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