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Perfect Identity

Deep inside, imagination rumbles,

soft at times as it falls

into a pool of absent years

 

impossible past experiences traveled

down dirt road dreams

as words slip without effort

into beautiful

 

he was a physical place inside of me

smooth like melted butter, a second skin

when mine became weary

 

the silver lining inside of my soul,

well rounded

a perfect shade of blue steel

 

I guess I will always try to be that perfect identity,

his hammock in the shade;

bringing drops of Jupiter to his eyes

 

while I continue to crash into myself

tripping over sentences with innuendos

playing tug of war with my heart

unsure of who I am 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Prompt: Distant Summons

Kathleen is a wonderful soul among us and nothing I write could compare to her original style.

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  • tara wilson gold member
    March 5, 2008

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    "the silver lining inside of my soul,"..I love that...


    ...this is one of your best, Becky

    An excellent poem - I relate much to...

  • Suzanne Dia
    March 3, 2008

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    Really beautiful, love how you describe his perfection and strive for it with your words.

    You express yourself so eloquently.




    • zochit2me gold member
      March 3, 2008
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      I can only wish to be eloquent in someone's life...

      Becky


  • misselaineous
    March 3, 2008

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    lovely stuff indeed
    you might like to check spelling in the title - should it be identity?


    • zochit2me gold member
      March 3, 2008
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      Whoops
      You are correct...Thanks for that catch

      Becky

  • Rowan gold member
    March 3, 2008

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    Damn... you got me all teary. lol.
    Loved the Jupiter line... sigh.
    I'm so glad you entered this, and I see Trina is too.


  • Randomly Beautiful
    March 2, 2008

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    Oh you are a beautiful soul yourself and this just has too many beautiful parts to mention...exquisite.


    • zochit2me gold member
      March 2, 2008
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      Thank you sweet lady. What an inspiration this was.


      Becky

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