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sultry summer night
the waxing moon winks,
love birds in London.

A contest entry

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  • penman gold member
    April 11
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    Wonderful

    Very well done. A great creation for the contest. Congratulations on the honorable mention.


  • Malabu
    March 7

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    this is a wonderfully written ku...a lovely image...presented only as you can...congrates Di..
    hope all is well with you...poetess
    Mal


  • Kelli Marie
    March 3

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    I love this! The graphic compliments it very much. Not that your words don't stand beautifully on their own. An excellent entry. Thank you for sharing in the contest. One thing is sultry should be lower case s...
    Kelli

  • BellaD
    March 2
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    Lovely haiku! Good luck in the contest.

  • Wandika gold member
    March 2
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    Nice Haiku

    New job going well I am sure. Too much talent for otherwise.


  • ukelova
    March 2
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    romantic

    Hello There.

    This is a nice, romantic haiku. It makes me think of how the moon can wink at lovebirds. Is it a cloud covering it, briefly?

    I've been told that haikus work better when two of the lines are joined. You could do this if you put the word "at' at the end of the second line or at the start of the third line.

    best wishes in the contest,
    BJ.

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