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The Northern Waters

 

 

 

 

 

with sails black as a moonless night
when the stars are drunk with slumber
a vessel bobs bereft of light
upon the northern waters

 

the deck is gray
the planks unkept
the rats run too and fro

 

the compass spins psychotically
while champagne glasses glow

 

held within the mighty hull
an Organ stands erect, alone

 

engraved upon its great encasement
creatures from the depths below

 

with sails black as a moonless night
when the stars are drunk with slumber
a vessel bobs bereft of light
within the northern water

 

without a hint of joy or mirth
at the farthest reaches of our earth

 

the pipes now bellow hellish tones
and spout a flame with every note

 

before the Organ is a hall
and there in graceful rings

 

dance aristocratic clothes
animated by unholy things

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • scoff
    April 4

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    Laced with outrageous imagery

    and hints of daunting secrets that should never be revealed. The raw power in these images is palpable, and the ending is dead on.


  • Teshi
    March 28
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    fuckin great! love the imagery


  • Ishtar
    March 4

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    you have done it again, sir!
    A very well written piece with easy flow and rhythm. Unlike your other pieces, though, this was easier to decipher.
    Some imagery in there is quiet lovely.

    Thank you for sharing!

    -Reni

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  • grannyeri gold member
    March 2

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    Liked the flow, rhythm and rhyme of these lines - very lyrical in quality. The stars are drunk with slumber - very metaphoric, good alliteration in these lines as well.

    . Rewarded 4

  • black sails [and i wanted you to complete the fantastic rhythym of these lines with rhyme] great opening stanza good title vg closing lines thanks for sharing this with us regards zaj

    . Rewarded 4

  • Drumlinegirl
    March 2
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    Good

    Very good.It is very imaginative.
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