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Existing Perfection

Three words…

          ‘I love you’,

Clichéd and out-of-date,

what a disaster to murmur these words aloud!

Then what do I say?

How do I show this…burning,

                                     if you will,

on the outside?

My love.

The gods were surely smiling when they birthed you,

and I praise Life itself for nurturing you,

but one thing still ponders

                     in thoughts not said aloud,

If Life made you,

                what about the rest?

Because it seems like you are the only bit of

                                    perfection

that has touched the Earth’s soul.

How do I say ‘I love you’

when, in this lifetime,

                  love doesn’t even exist?

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Quote Prompt: "What can I say about life? Do I praise it for letting you live or damn it for allowing the rest?"

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  • Viva La Vie Boheme
    April 16, 2008
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    Ididn't see that I'd read it before sorry Cass!


  • Viva La Vie Boheme
    April 16, 2008

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    Wow. I LOVE this! Seriously. The form, the honesty, the cynicism... everything! The quote is used in a different context than it is in the book, but I like that. Wow. Thanks for entering!


  • Swan song gold member
    March 15, 2008

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    What I like about this poem is the profoundness of it.
    This could be a perfect greeting card and don't think of that as an insult because this is deep and thought provoking. Well done one hell of a poem!!!!

  • SoulWhispher
    March 2, 2008

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    You havae done so well with the prompt, you have weaved magic with your words, great job Daughter, Love Dad


  • Topaze
    March 2, 2008
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    Nice

    Very well done, expressed with purpose and imagination. Great Piece!


  • Viva La Vie Boheme
    March 2, 2008
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    "The gods were surely smiling when they birthed you" - smiling seems ambiguous to me. Smirking, self-satisfied? Or joyous and pleased?

    I LOVE the personification of Life, too. Awesome stuff.

    (Ah, I love analysis.)

    This reminds me of the book in some ways, actually. One specific part of it.


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    March 2, 2008

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    HOW THE HELL DID YOU GET THAT FONT ON HERE TEACH ME NOW ON MSN...wait stupid caps this is a beautifulwrite and just wow beutiful


    • And Hyetal
      March 2, 2008
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      Never Fall In Love taught me, but she said it's a secret.

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