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Our Journey

Always there for me,
standing there.
You were always free

from reality's glare.

Rules did not matter to you,
they still don't.
If I didn't have a clue
you'd point the answer out.

You stood by me in moments of grief,

held my hand as I died inside.

Stole me heart like a common thief

and let my sadness subside.

 

Will you continue our journey,

side by side?

I will always hold you here,

inside. 

A contest entry

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  • Miss Faerie Greeters member
    April 5, 2008
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    Welcome to allpoetry and thanks for entering!

    Excellent structure and minimal use of rhyme. I can see that you are thanking people in general for the trust and support through relationships, and that is important.

    Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest
    I hope you enjoy allpoetry

    Faerie
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  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    March 31, 2008

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    Thank you for your entry and Welcome to Allpoetry

    Good flow and structure. Someone to be there by your side through the good and the bad. That is the most important thing in any relationship. Thanks for sharing.

    I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.

    God Bless
    Tammy
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  • Clairie
    March 21, 2008
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    so lovely (:
    good luck at the contest


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    March 8, 2008
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    Welcome to AllPoetry

    Touching and lovely this relaly strikes me; though I confess reading it with such dark text colour made it difficult to really read in general as I had to highlight it to see it and it seems rather harsh for such a sweet write. Just my thoughts.

    ♥
    Thank you for your entry
    Best of luck
    Stay safe
    ~Manda


  • Dienush
    March 5, 2008

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    Welcome to AllPoetry

    I think the last two stanzas are the most touching. This poem shows a great sense of intimacy. You are lucky to have that Good luck in the contest.

    ~Diana


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    March 3, 2008

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    Welcome to Allpoetry

    A lovely poem indeed. I would love to know who you have dedicated this to. Obviously someone very special. Some lovely images in this also.
    Thanks so much for entering our contest
    Gaylene

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