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Goodbye, My lady

I sail on stormy waters
Across oceans filled with tears
I'd sail here now and forever
Just to have you here with me

[CHORUS]
And I'd forfeit my life gladly
For the one I loved so
Oh! goodbye, goodbye my lady
My life was yours so completely
Now you've set me free

Now life just drifts by so slowly
I'm tossed and turned with every breeze
Every wave and every motion
Is simply magnified by all the tears

[CHORUS]
And I'd forfeit my life gladly
For the one I loved so
Oh! goodbye, goodbye my lady
My life was yours so completely
Now you've set me free

All the words that were once spoken
Echo back at me now I'm alone
And though action speaks louder than words
I'm too far gone to get to a phone

[CHORUS]
And I'd forfeit my life gladly
For the one I loved so
Oh! goodbye, goodbye my lady
My life was yours so completely
Now you've set me free

So I'll set my sails towards the horizon
Where the new world waits and lies
Perhaps I'll find a new love someday
If I can get past all the sad goodbyes

[CHORUS]
And I'd forfeit my life gladly
For the one I loved so
Oh! goodbye, goodbye my lady
My life was yours so completely
Now you've set me free





Author notes

"Goodbyes are lullabies"

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  • Shassidy
    April 6, 2008

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    Great job with this piece! I like the repetition of the chorus because it makes that stanza powerful and I like how you ended this piece with it because it ties the piece together nicely. My favorite stanza is the one that starts out, "So I'll set my sails towards the horizon..." because of the nice imagery and emotions that are conveyed in that. The title is a little bit of an over-used idea, but it reflects the poem nicely, so it works out. Great job and good luck in the contest!


  • Ms Raneika
    March 15, 2008
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    aw a touching piece I thank you for entering my contest much love, Raneika


  • Clinging-to-Life
    March 2, 2008

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    Interesting, I liked the last verse.

    ""So I'll set my sails towards the horizon
    Where the new world waits and lies
    Perhaps I'll find a new love someday
    If I can get past all the sad goodbyes""

    Very touching and beautiful. You also have a minor typo in the first stanza. You are missing the word "You" in the last line of the first stanza/verse. Thank you for entering.

    But sadly, I have noticed you did not follow my rules so therefore I must DQ you.