Into the ocean,
I will sink.
Bathe my tears,
In your shades of pink.
Into the bottle,
I will drown.
Cleansing my scars,
While your not around.
Into the smoke,
I will choke.
Relieved of anxiety,
Which I do not provoke.
Into the ground,
I will decend.
Screaming in chains,
This is the end.
A contest entry
- Dark and Pain by takemypainaway.
400 points, ended March 15, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Painful Desires by Lost Vampyre Angel.
1000 points, ended March 6, 2008, 46 entries
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Comments
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thats very sad
but an awesome poe -
so sad, but I love it. I feel like this right now, so thiis just emphazizes my feeling like shit. Great poem though.
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wow this is really good,
not forced rhyme,
and steady flow and structure,
thank you for the entry,
much love good luck,
vamp xxx -
very haunting i like this
i can feel this poems words attack
nicly done
thank you so much for the entry
--kat
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So bloody and haunting here hunny, trapped again in this nightmare and hell...
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it is very nice poem the way it starts breathing within the sadness...but still it carries the purity of the heart...with a great flow and rhyming...thank you.
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wow
that was a short one but absolutly amazin it was a one wit alot of meaning and definately from the heart this was one wit a a nce flow and nice rhyme to it i give you 3 stars and eventually will read more of your writin and peek into your soul once more
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This is great! So sad. Great rhyming. Look at my stuff too please!
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