Could you deny a grand emotion
or push it to the side
could you stop the surging ocean
or stem a sweeping tide
could you bar the breeze from blowing
or halt a bird in flight
could you stop the flowers growing
or turn day into night
no man can stop nor mind hold still
when the heart longs for what it will
A contest entry
- Tryyy and fit a square into a circle :] *OPTIONS* by innocence jaded.xx.
525 points, ended May 2, 2008, 43 entries
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KEWL!!!
Love it. I find poems I like but I love yours. Beautiful! -SunShine-
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well...
What poetry, super flow, great content, you have charmed my eyes with your exceptional work, good luck in the contest... should come out tops!...ian.
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This is a sound, beautiful piece of writing my friend. The title you have chosen fits so very well with the theme of your poem, well done! I did so enjoy reading this.
Welcome Back!
Katie
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nice flow of rhymes there.where you ended this is quite the most beautiful turn.
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beautiful, talented piece. love the imagery throughout. love can be a fight and a beauty and i feel you capture both.
well done.
blessings *stomps
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Amazing
Excellent imagery! I really liked this. I just fell like it ended too soon. Good rhyme scheme. Thanks for sharing.
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good rhyme schemes love is "when the heart longs for what it will" very good write without being 'too-flowery' thanks for sharing regards zaj
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it's beautiful and right to the point...i like it....it asks a question that mainly relates to the fact that it would be a "no" to each...it's full of rhetorical questions, and you've completed it without having to say to the answer to any of the questions...i love it....great write...
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Very sweet
I liked the way it tickles the emotions, and I like the images.
One point though... I think that on line 7 you meant to use the word "flower's" with an appostrophy because the growing belongs to the flower.
Other then that, I like it
Peace.
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Hey I really like this. It says everything it should and flows very well and it could fit very nicely in a quality card for a very special person.
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Perfect sentiment
The Perfect way to express how so many feel... not being able to choose who to fall in love with... this is a great write. One suggestion from me would be to remove the comma in the last line.... unless you like it with the dramatic pause or something... i just think it would flow better. great job expressing the sentiments felt so often by people though!
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THIS IS REALLY NICE, YOUR RIGHT NOTHING CAN STOP THE EMOTIONS OF REAL LOVE, HOWEVER I FEEL THE LAST APOSTRAPHY IS NOT NEEDED BESIDES THAT THIS IS A NICE LITTLE WRITE WITH SOME GREAT IMAGERY ( :
no man can stop, nor mind hold still
when the heart longs, for what it will
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Liked the sentiments expressed in these lines - love hits us and we can't stop it; even if we don't want it, there it is. Makes us do crazy things, and takes our mind on a journey of discovery. Liked the flow of these lines, the rhythm rhyme and message you share in the poem. Good alliteration as well.
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Pari, You've written a poem?
and what a come back... excellent work here Pari...
mina
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