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I'm not gonna last.

Treading down the broken path
finally all alone at last
No one here but my thoughts and I
No liers left to break my pride
Even my sweet razorblade has left my side
It was my best friend and there for me all the time
Am I really that bad of a kid?
Who's sorrow has left me sick and thin
Scars all over; battle wounds from my war
The war inside me that leaves me tired and sore
I only want to be left alone
I know I can get through this on my own
My family's there for me nevertheless
They constantly cease to rest
They fight to get me help I don't need
In the end nothings won, I start to bleed
A river of my own self-released blood
Won't make up for my lost childhood
But as I tread on my own broken path
I soon come to realize, I'm not gonna last.

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  • Sharitti
    March 5

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    I can definately feel your pain and the darkness that chains you. Do I not remember it so well. I loved your imagery and your emotion so well expressed into words. Thank you for entering


  • SunDew
    February 7
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    p.s.

    I also need your screenname, please.


    • bsikes2000
      February 14
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      my screen name..

      did you mean my screen name on here? its bsikes2000... is that what you were asking for?

  • SunDew
    February 7
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    Wow. This has a depth to it few others I've read have achieved. To know you're not going to last. Really know it...wow. All the cutting, the depression. I feel it, there, in your poem.

    I hope you are able to get past this, because life really is good, once you get a nice taste of it.

    Thanks for sharing & good luck!
    ~Bright Cheetah

    • bsikes2000
      March 4
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      thanks

      i wrote this a while back and things have gotten alot better since then. thank you for your sincere concern. im glad you liked my work. i hope to have more soon but im facing some serious writing block issues. im sure its normal for a writer to get this every once in a while but i havent been able to write anything at all for a few months now. im slightly aggitated. maybe you have anything to possibly help me? i could use some advice on how to get past this block.
      thanks again.

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