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How I Hate You So

Your stinging words did
cut me like a knife
you played on my emotions
and controlled my life

You used me so badly
and took away my pride
sworn to secrecy
in none could I confide

They'd rape with strap-ons
and fuck me 'til I'm raw
I couldn't reach the phone
to even call the law

your groping hands
did fondle my skin
it made my blood boil
as I cringed from within

I couldn't get away
no matter how I tried
my only thoughts within
were, "I just want to die"

I know that somehow
God will make you pay
for you will get yours
somehow, some way

Until then just know
I'll always hate your guts
no time will change that...
no ifs, ands or buts

Author notes

MAY BE TRIGGERING, Has some harsh situations and adult language/ Chose option #3/chose option #3 for dirty little princess
Fact about me: I am very stubborn. I love to help people. I am a crossword freak.

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Comments

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  • A-Daisy-Among-Roses
    November 24, 2008
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    i like this alot, it flows really well. well done


    • sunflowers21573
      November 29, 2008
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      THank you for commenting on my piece. I am glad u liked it and that you thought it flowed well, that is nice to know. I hope to hear more from you.


  • Jaffa-
    November 22, 2008

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    Lol, crossword freak
    I really loved it. It was so sad.
    It had a lot of emotion and very good language!
    Also the flow and the rhyme was flawless. Much luck in all the contests.


  • AloneForever-
    October 19, 2008

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    I absolutely love the pain in this. I just hope this isnt true
    Great Write
    Thanks for enetring


  • penman gold member
    October 18, 2008

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    Wonderful

    Wow another great creation. So very well expressed and intense. Such descriptions used. Best of luck in the different contest.


  • Ntagatf
    August 22, 2008

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    This is a great write, lots of pain, depression, and of course hatred. This must have been very hard for you to write and i give you props for that. Anyway thank you for entering my contest, i wish you the best of luck!!! Keep up the great work!


  • TheGangstress
    June 14, 2008

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    This held more anger than sadness, which is a rarity for poems of this nature. I think your word choice was fairly well (it could use a little more creativity, but I'm not complaining) and my other suggestion would be to possibly separate some of the lines by stanzas to make it flow better. This feels like a poem that, if I read it out loud, I would have nowhere to take a breath.

    Thank you for following the rules and for entering my contest. I wish you the best of luck!


  • SuiCiDaLKiSs
    June 4, 2008

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    wow

    i feel the anger...did this really happen to you?great write i love the flow of the piece..good luck!


  • crazymomma
    June 3, 2008

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    Your anger is obvious in this. I was saddened by the part where you say you will never forgive because I personally know that forgiveness is the only way you can ever heal. Great poem


  • Cat10
    May 21, 2008

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    this is a great poem! and I really enjoyed all the power and emontion behind it, but I do not see a bronze trophy attached, if you can send me the link of the contest that you recieved bronze, that would be great so I can judge you! thanks!


  • nuttynettles
    May 4, 2008

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    well...this wasn't what i was looking for in my contest but...other than that absolutely beautiful and truthful...i can feel your pain


  • Poetess12
    April 26, 2008

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    When one falls victim to sexual abuse it does cause anger and hate. I can understand this poem in that way. It stands out to me in your poem where it says,
    "sworn to secrecy
    in none could I confide"
    and where it says,
    "I couldn't reach the phone
    to even call the law."
    and where it says,
    "My only thoughts within
    were, "I just want to die"
    It leaves one with so much pain inside when you feel like you can't get it out or talk about it or especially seek help.
    I can relate to this poem in a way from a past marriage.
    Thanks for sharing this poem.
    Thank You for your entry.


  • N e a r
    April 20, 2008

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    I like the ending with "no ifs, ands or buts". It's like saying "that is what I feel ~ nothing can change it, don't try to change it, END OF STORY". Again, your words are strong. They speak volumes and measures that some people are too insecure to reach for. You express emotions that are uncontrollable and appropriate for the situation, such as your anger towards the person(s) who are causing you this stress.
    Thanks for your entry.

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