She looks-
Brown eyes slipping discretely
Trying to formulate
a story in her head.
He sits.
Shoulders hunched,
eyes down, lips moving silently
pale hands shaking.
Hiding something.
She thinks.
A druggie?
Or is he-
is he scared too?
The girl gathers her things in her lap,
watching as his eyes dart to her
and then down again.
His hands have stopped shaking
Though now he wrings them
swallowing words in his throat.
What is he so afraid to say?
She wants to ask-
but won't.
"I once had a dream"
Startled she looks up,
staring him in the eye as he speaks.
"I was riding in a train-
much like this one..
You were there."
The girl frowns,
raising an eyebrow slightly-
"What happened?"
Why would he be so afraid?
Why does it matter to her anyway..
Why would he tell her?
" We crashed."
Author notes
What happens when you fate is intertwined with the person you study?
I'm taking Psychology now, and I do this all the time.. I sit in buses or trains, and I watch. I formulate stories for the people, I give them names and pasts...
I was watching one guy for about two months, he always rode in the same seat on the bus- and I watched from different ones.
One day when I sat down next to me and he grinned.
"Danielle."
It turned out- part of my infatuation with the guy was because we'd met, though neither of us knew where, but my 'name' I'd given him, was the right name.
He told me he'd been dreaming about me.
When I asked what happened he frowned.
Somehow, I always died.
A contest entry
- Let's Get the Ink Flowing!!! by Auburn Sunrise.
1800 points, ended March 16, 2008, 30 entries
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Comments
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unique and haunting. I really enjoyed this...thank you for sharing, blessings always~ Trisha
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Wow... how haunting and how fate does bring people together awesome job I loved this so much write on!
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Wow... chilling and creepy...
(both the poem and the author's notes).
I love stories like this though - they're fascinating. I adore how you conveyed the tale, with just the right amount of detail and wording. Masterfully told.
An excellent and unique entry - it definitely stands out from the other entries in subject and style.
Thank you for sharing this awesome poem and the story behind it (I think that the author's notes really help and add a great deal to the piece).
Thanks and good luck!
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