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And so I came to the foot of the old mountain
to which I somehow belonged, the one I felt
my own hands built for you
at some point in time
above the four winds
of this world.


I am here. You are here. I am in awe.


I do not see struggle or stone,
rather a summit of stars,
a man, a woman
of new.

My hands are ready,
this hand and the other one,
the one that rises to love,
the one that is open
again.


i sense ascension in you.
today our feet no longer weep:


like Neruda, you and I
are climbing the ladder of the earth,
up to the Machu Picchu of love, to the high citadel
of its ancient voice,

so that the sun can hitch itself to the sundial
of our bodies, and speak through our blood,
not in the cries of slaves,

but rather in song, a sea spray
of song after song.

It matters not if we tumble like autumn
to a single death, or get lost
like Inca spades
in the sand -

  


it is here,
in the cry of condors,


from peak to peak, from air to air,
that archeologists of the future
will find the new wonder
of us.

 

 

 

 

 






 

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Inspired by Pablo Neruda’s epic poem “The heights of Machu Picchu”.

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  • How wonderful to come to a mountain and not see struggle, but stars. Every time we build on love it feels so fresh and new yet has an ancient precedent that connects us to all civilizations. A very touching piece which gave me great pleasure to read.

  • grm
    November 21, 2008

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    i love you Nicolette Marguerite!





  • grm
    November 21, 2008
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  • Spiritual Soul gold member
    June 11, 2008

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    Such beautiful imagery in this piece, I loved it, it takes you to a place, and I feel the love. Thanks for your entry!
    Blessings,
    ~Michaela~


  • jocelynclaire
    June 4, 2008
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    Beautiful and challenging. Thanks for entering!


  • Asdzaa Nadleehe
    April 5, 2008

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    Amazing beauty...I adore the language and flow of this write..It is both elegant and sensual and holds so much compassion of so many elements....

    I just adore this...smiles
    Many blessings to you and your pen...
    ~A~


  • Swan song gold member
    April 5, 2008

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    Oh my! This is something totally beautiful!!!!
    You are so good at bonding love with nature.
    This made my toes curl with delight. Ouch! so good!


  • Ithica silver member
    April 3, 2008

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    This is like a mountain of love, reaching ever higher and higher into the universe... to find it's place among the stars! Just beautiful...


    • Nicolette gold member
      April 3, 2008
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      ... thank you, Ithica!! It is indeed a mountain of love!


  • Mr Vertigo
    March 7, 2008

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    Very nice.

    You paint a sensual portrait.

    I love the way you slipped that one line of rhyme in there.
    That’s just hot, I do that a lot. The effect is great.

    The enire poem itself is like making love. Very beautiful stuff.
    Its soft, its hopeful. And it just kind of ripples over you like…. Well you know.
    Lol

    Oops…. Wrong room.

    You’re a sweetie
    T’s right you are the best.

    Now if you’ll excuse me, I think I’ll have a cigarette.

    • Nicolette gold member
      March 7, 2008
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      Hi Charles, good to see you here again! Thanks, my friend - you are just too kind, but it you did make me smile


  • Elora Danon gold member
    March 4, 2008

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    another piece that found me with a catch in my breath and my "bladder near my eye" (thank you Frank McCourt).

    i can relate to this one so much. my life has changed dramatically in the last year. where i once thought i'd walk alone for the rest of my life, i now have someone to walk beside. how joyful it is to make our mark upon this earth and to

    "...speak through our blood,
    not in the cries of slaves,

    but rather in song, a sea spray
    of song after song"

    your piece sings volumes and still holds onto that grounding factor that we seem to find with the right person. i hope you continue to climb the mountain together and someday touch the stars.

    beautiful, beautiful and more beautiful still.

    thank you for entering and for inspiring me every single day.

    becky

    • Nicolette gold member
      March 4, 2008
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      Oh I'm the one that should thank you...for "making" me write the mountain of love, Becky! Thank you for the lovely comment... this is one mountain I intend to climb to touch the stars. I wish that for you too


  • DeletedProfile
    March 4, 2008

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    Of all the women I know, you are the one whom I most want to see happy. Our one conversation (the one about Africa and I'm sure you remember the rest) showed me that you know the landscape of my soul because you too have been there. It was in that conversation that you became more than just a poet to me. You became a woman whose happiness matters deeply to me.

    In this poem, I can see that you've finally found what most people live their entire lives lacking: your other half. May you complete, inspire and love each other. And, of course, best wishes.







    • Nicolette gold member
      March 4, 2008
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      Yes, I remember our conversation about Africa and the rest.... thank you so much - you are most generous and gracious...


  • Leslie gold member
    March 3, 2008

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    this is quite beautiful, higher point of love Machu Picchu, haha I haven't seen something as beautiful than that except from Guatemala... but in any case, this is up lifting and loving and tender..... the beauty of love, there is love that araises in the middle of winter....

     

    :f:F


  • Musimwa
    March 3, 2008

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    good work dear friend. Keep writing . I am now in Maputo Mozambique. I finished my studies in Kenya. Good day


  • Saint Merman
    March 3, 2008
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    It's always a delight to read your poetry, Nicolette. ^______^ Great job!


  • Namita
    March 3, 2008
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    "so that the sun can hitch itself to the sundial
    of our bodies, and speak through our blood,
    not in the cries of slaves"


    This piece is beyond beautiful. Your poetry is amazing- so very beautiful... your poetry has life. And I love that; much more than anything else. That life.

    - namita


  • leander Moderators member
    March 3, 2008

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    I've been looking forward to your next write my friend, because somehow you always manage to bring such a soothing feel to me when I read your words. And especially after friday, when I got the results from the 'mystery shopper'. I've been living from adrenaline, stress and Jovy's snore (which, for once, I couldn't be more thankful) since then

    I still feel like a balloon that will explode if you just even look at me though, but at least I have something to focus my mind on, other than those stupid results - lol


  • Randomly Beautiful
    March 3, 2008

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    This is beautiful poetry. You are so very talented. I read the month poems that Namita used of yours on her contest. Simply stunning...truly.

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    March 3, 2008

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    Magnificent, Marvellous, Majestic, Pure Poetry

    The title is perfect, it steps into the poetry at the highest point and maintains that heady height as the reader is privilidged to not just read but to feel the bounty of this bond that archeologists will discover. Even if it is Venutians from Venus that translate these words at some point in the future I have no doubt that they too will unearth the size of sighs built with love, light, depth and the beautiful essence of eternity within.


  • arafura gold member
    March 3, 2008

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    "like Neruda, you and I
    are going to climb the ladder of the earth,
    up to the Machu Picchu of love, to the high citadel
    of its ancient voice..."

    Simply wonderful my talented friend! Pablo would approve I'm sure... Good luck in the contest!


  • klassy lassy
    March 3, 2008

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    I saw this wonder at the wedding I attended last night...where "hands are ready,
    this hand and the other one,
    the one that rises to love,
    the one that is open
    again."

    When the heart is ready, the walls blow away in dust where two walk in love and trust.

    What a radiance I feel in these words of yours. Even if I couldn't sing, I'd make a joyful noise!


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    March 2, 2008

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    this is very beautiful Nic, what a great opening and as you know, a little Neruda goes a long way..



    al


  • Cannonsfire
    March 2, 2008

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    Like the title of the contest suggests...because I can't get enough of you my friend...the images are amazing and the voice used in it create that soft enhancement of peace and love that I know is always in your heart. Love, C


  • Lyrical Soul silver member
    March 2, 2008

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    Simply beautiful my vriendin. Simply beautiful!

    ~Lyrical


  • IronIcecream
    March 2, 2008

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    the condor
    rested on the peak of the world
    ascending
    from his brow
    sweat diffused in rainbows



  • SerenityNChains gold member
    March 2, 2008

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    Such soft and tender laments of love, that tenderly echo the genteel words of one of my favorite poets, Pablo Neruda. Indeed I am sure he would see this write with the same tenderness of heart as the one you penned it for, and those who are blessed to read it. My applause are humble, but you deserve them on this work of beauty, and so much more.

    Blessed be,
    Billie Jean


  • PageTurner
    March 2, 2008

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    Emotionally Moving Masterpiece...

    I'm as giddy as an alolescent,
    confessin' he now likes kissin' girls,
    better then inkwelling their curls.

    You've taken me to the heights of delights,
    once again, my Friend The Happiness, Hope,
    and High Horizons you've reached are Wonderful!


    "it is here,
    in the cry of condors,

    from peak to peak, from air to air,
    that archeologists of the future
    will find the new wonder
    of us."

    Ascension Assured, Scribe!

    ~ Nicky♥


  • marc creamore
    March 2, 2008

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    Massively beautiful . . . it took me to the heights of both poetic expression and the orchard of the sun, the moon, the stars . . . Nic, you never cease to amaze me . . . and all of you who read this little note, do yourself a favour and buy Nicolette's book . . . it is one of the most poetically beautiful experiences you will ever have!!!!!


  • Sonja
    March 2, 2008

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    Perfect!

    The highest peak of love... ascension of your own... breath my dear friend the ever best fresh air of eternity...it is not simple to go there and to see the unique view of "bare land and dust" under your feet. And the idea of bones wrapped together is magnificent. Sigh...
    ~Sonja~


  • quietly burning
    March 2, 2008
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    you finally did your "Machu Picchu" but did so in your own very particular way.

  • tara wilson gold member
    March 2, 2008

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    "My hands are ready,
    this hand and the other one,
    the one that rises to love,
    the one that is open
    again."



    This is an absolutely gorgeous love poem....

    I love it...so beautiful, Nic..

  • Rowan gold member
    March 2, 2008

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    Definitely a Neruda/Nicolette feel to this. A get a sense of hope from this, exquisite penning.


  • Night Hope gold member
    March 2, 2008

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    "but rather in song, a sea spray
    of song after song.

    It matters not if we tumble like autumn
    to a single death, or get lost
    like Inca spades
    in the sand -"

    You know how much I love this poem, my Sister, how much I adore Neruda. Ahhh, but I love you ever so much more. This is absolutely superb writing. Ascension, indeed. I can see the soles of your feet as they rise to dance upon the shimmering clouds. Someone is going to be quite pleased...& I hope it's you. Good luck in the contest, my dear Friend. Vlindertjie

    • Nicolette gold member
      March 2, 2008
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      I love you too, my friend.... and that slow dance with Neruda poem of yours is still one of my favourites - just like you


  • NurseChilly gold member
    March 2, 2008

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    perfection, the best till last huh!!! damn girl, you slayed us all...

    this is stunning work Nicci...



    Gill.x


    • Nicolette gold member
      March 2, 2008
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      I laboured like the slaves of the old days, lolol... thank you, Gilly


  • Cat gold member
    March 2, 2008

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    It matters not if we tumble like autumn
    to a single death, or get lost
    like Inca spades
    in the sand -

    This is especially pretty-

    m

  • Suzanne Dia
    March 2, 2008

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    I'm so jealous In a nice way, though.

    ahem..

    wonder if I'll ever make it to south afrika, suppose I'll have to try at this rate.





    This is beautiful, and i absolutely love Neruda.




    • Nicolette gold member
      March 2, 2008
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      I would love to see you here in the rainbowland, Suzie....yep, you gotta try

      Thank you.....

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