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Time judges the world
– the despotic tock of clocks
breaks the back of life –
one day woman,
    the next
        carrion.


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(words I have kicking around - as well here as anywhere)

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  • JWGoethe
    March 3, 2008
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    sad cryptic powerful


  • helena.poet
    March 3, 2008

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    very special

    not usual seen around. and very nice .
    at the first sight to a naive eye it could look like easy ....
    but is actually quite tough to read and understand even though is short!
    Personally, i am into a bit different kind of writing. but i truly liked this particular one !


  • Star Shine
    March 3, 2008
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    Wow, time does fly by trying to take our lives with it, interesting perspective.

  • ocerus
    March 3, 2008

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    Nicely done. 'Course, if you ladies get to be lovely carrion, what do WE get to be? Eww!! - oce


  • Biciaksr
    March 3, 2008

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    truly unique

    the poems that hit me the most are the short ones that leave me thinking, wondering, and searching for its deepest and simplest meanings. very well done


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      March 3, 2008
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      Thank you. Sometimes they look easy, but often getting them just right is elusive - particularly if you have been given a set number to work from.


  • grannyeri gold member
    March 3, 2008

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    Good to have these kind of words kicking around now and then. Nice golden winner you have penned here. COngratulations.

  • Zyskandar A Jaimot
    March 3, 2008
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    very good write great summation 'carrion' thanks for posting regards zaj

    • Mairi bheag gold member
      March 3, 2008
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      Thanks, zaj, for the applause, the comment and for surfing by.


  • PerVirtuous
    March 2, 2008
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    This is twonkalicious! Ha ha ha. Good job on grabbing the vase.


  • Amera gold member
    March 2, 2008

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    "as well here as anywhere" indeed! I see you just kick words into the winner's circle. I'm so impressed with your writing.

    Love,
    Amera♥


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      March 2, 2008

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      Thank you sis. It's true, though. These were amongst a few words I had, half-thinking of composing a longer, free-verse poem. I put them onto the page, they looked right, et voila!
      xx M


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    March 2, 2008
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    Truly loved this piece, congrats on the Gold

    • Mairi bheag gold member
      March 2, 2008
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      It came as a bit of a shock, but thank you very much indeed.


  • delightfulmess silver member
    March 2, 2008

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    Nice.... Love this
    best of luck in the contest.


    Delila

  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    March 2, 2008

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    Wonderful
    Very well done. best of luck in the contest.


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      March 2, 2008
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      And just as I was writing the remark below, you hit me with a wee yellow vase! Thank you - my cup runneth over.

      Phew, now I have to work out a PIF!

    • Mairi bheag gold member
      March 2, 2008
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      {chuckling} That's in your hands Thank you.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    March 2, 2008

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    Time is no friend
    He doesn't forgive
    As long as you live
    He's chasing the end
    But your poem rocks!


  • luna-midnight gold member
    March 2, 2008
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    lol. this si great, i really like it, unique. good luck in the ocntest!
    stephanie =)

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