Time judges the world
– the despotic tock of clocks
breaks the back of life –
one day woman,
the next
carrion.
Author notes
(words I have kicking around - as well here as anywhere)
In a list
A contest entry
- PIF 10/20 by Laura Lamarca.
450 points, ended March 2, 2008, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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sad cryptic powerful
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Three special words. Thank you.
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very special
not usual seen around. and very nice .
at the first sight to a naive eye it could look like easy ....
but is actually quite tough to read and understand even though is short!
Personally, i am into a bit different kind of writing. but i truly liked this particular one ! -
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I'll check yours out. Thanks for your kind comment.
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Wow, time does fly by trying to take our lives with it, interesting perspective.
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Thank you.
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Nicely done. 'Course, if you ladies get to be lovely carrion, what do WE get to be? Eww!! - oce
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I shudder to think, oce.
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truly unique
the poems that hit me the most are the short ones that leave me thinking, wondering, and searching for its deepest and simplest meanings. very well done -
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Thank you. Sometimes they look easy, but often getting them just right is elusive - particularly if you have been given a set number to work from.
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Good to have these kind of words kicking around now and then. Nice golden winner you have penned here. COngratulations.
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Thank you eri. It turned out better than I expected.
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very good write great summation 'carrion' thanks for posting regards zaj
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Thanks, zaj, for the applause, the comment and for surfing by.
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This is twonkalicious! Ha ha ha. Good job on grabbing the vase.
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I had a space on the shelf
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"as well here as anywhere" indeed! I see you just kick words into the winner's circle. I'm so impressed with your writing.
Love,
Amera♥
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Thank you sis. It's true, though. These were amongst a few words I had, half-thinking of composing a longer, free-verse poem. I put them onto the page, they looked right, et voila!
xx M
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Truly loved this piece, congrats on the Gold
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It came as a bit of a shock, but thank you very much indeed.
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Nice.... Love this
best of luck in the contest.
Delila
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Thank you, Delila.
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Wonderful
Very well done. best of luck in the contest.
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And just as I was writing the remark below, you hit me with a wee yellow vase! Thank you - my cup runneth over.
Phew, now I have to work out a PIF! -
{chuckling} That's in your hands
Thank you.
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Time is no friend
He doesn't forgive
As long as you live
He's chasing the end
But your poem rocks!
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Didn't take you long to pounce either! Thank you.
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lol. this si great, i really like it, unique. good luck in the ocntest!
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Wow, you were onto it quickly - the ink isn't even dry! Thank you.
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haha. welcies =)
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