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caressing strings





it began with a song
soft sounds
transformed into
exotic cadence

he stroked her edges
caressed her skin
poured his rhythm
within her

and from a single touch
music was created
between them











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  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    April 24

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    The essence of tender love
    spilled lyrically from the page.

    Mari, this is superb!!!!!!!

    Aesthete

  • voices
    April 21
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    i know you asked me not to read your squish squish,
    but, damn, you do it so well.

  • forty-one
    March 3

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    You took your readers there, and beyond with this one. I'd call this poetic bling. Doesn't get much better than this in so few words.

    41


  • ardentMarch gold member
    March 3

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    "he stroked her edges
    caressed her skin
    poured his rhythm
    within her"

    there are soooo many ways to go with this poem...it's succinct and beautiful..

    it makes me think of all the ways a man can touch us mentally, spiritually & sensually... before they actually touch us, physically. Foreplay, I suppose..lol.

    thanks for entering this lovely little poem...I love it


  • Peteskid gold member
    March 2

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    so beautiful, quiet words and lingering images of caring; strings respond to touch and yield resonant tones that find and capture our thoughts... so very well done here...excellent...'skid


  • Nicolette gold member
    March 2

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    Aaah yes, the music of love, nothing more beautiful than the creation and the expression of this cadence. Beautiful poetry... i could hear and feel the music...play on!!

    ~ Nicolette


  • Mallig gold member
    March 2

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    Such a lovely piece, fluid and rhythmic just like its theme. Beautiful!


  • Yemassee silver member
    March 2

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    Double K said it, "wow."

    And she's right about the song too, but one that can only be felt through understanding of that feeling, of love, but not just love, a depth of desire and love combined in understanding...because that is when the real music plays.

    Beautiful like you, in and out.

    The single touch...that's great...


  • Namita silver member
    March 2

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    Wow. I love this; I simply do!!

    "and from a single touch
    music was created
    between them"

    You've created music here... I can hear music; notes fo every tenor. Beautiful, Mari.

    - namita

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