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Ambush

Missing image

Engulfed, I am a shadow

Within the dark loom

Of night

 

Calmly settled in a

Gruesome rest

That delights

 

My cold soul bent

On indulging

Sinister desire

 

As moon accentuates

Features while

Fate does conspire

 

With duty and the

Raw courage of

A berserker unbound

 

Entertaining the thought

Of death as I lay

Upon cold ground.

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Option #3

I am a military veteran, and sometimes, the dark memories return, like an unsettled ghost.

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  • Elizabeth883
    May 17, 2008
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    Very well penned! I would like you to thank you for entering my contest- good luck!


  • Cup-a-Joe
    March 15, 2008
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    Top Notch

    Wonderfully penned.
    Joe


  • fortyninereasons gold member
    March 2, 2008

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    I keep coming back to this. Very poignant. Alot of veterans have ghosts that need to be laid to rest. With hope, may they eventually disappear. J


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    March 2, 2008

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    Awww... I didn't realize that those memories haunted you so, Michael...


    I'm so sorry.
    With that said, I'm very glad you wrote this. It helped me see inside your mind a little more, helped fit together another piece of the puzzle that is MJ.
    I loved the flawless style, wonderful form, and expressive descriptions. A very solid, lucid write full of poignance.
    Thank you for entering this awesome piece!
    I'm here any time you need to talk about it. I understand too well how memories can haunt.
    Thank you again for this splendid poem.


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    March 2, 2008

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    wiw daddy your words so strong and deep and cleverly written. the darkness really has a nightmare feel to it and captures the reader in the tale.well done daddy i love you


  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    March 2, 2008

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    Erreie...I felt like I was there Dad...Strong deep words here and like always so cleverly formed



    Cin


  • CountryCousin
    March 2, 2008

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    How well I know.

    I can say that this is not uncommon for the veterans of war and if you will the wars here within the states. Especially drug wars and extreme crimes. You wrote a very deep piece.


  • Margaret Denham gold member
    March 2, 2008

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    We do what we have to do in any situation and learn to live with it, Michael. Always remember that the dreams are never so dark that a light cannot be shone to light your way.




  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    March 2, 2008

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    Aww I can imagine those dark memories are haunting and very unsettling indeed. Many vets will be able to feel this poem deeply I don't doubt.

    I certainly left me feeling affected and I know nothing of being involved in war!

    Your rhyme was great in this!! You master any style with ease and grace!!


    Jacks

  • ashjoe76
    March 2, 2008

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    :)

    Calmly settled in a

    Gruesome rest

    That delights


    My cold soul bent

    On indulging

    Sinister desire

    Awesome, man! Wonder how you keep doing this...

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