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Evil Imaginings

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

From the rhythm of my pulse
penned in drops of blooded ink
the dagger is my quill

 

Concealed, congealed
wounded written script
from the rhythm of my pulse

 

Your conception
reflects repulsion
penned in drops of blooded ink

 

Embodiment of thought
your death draws closer

THE DAGGER IS MY QUILL!

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Contest – 50 Word Picture Prompt 4

Artwork by Chris Ortega

Poetry form… Cascade
a/b/c, d/e/A, f/g/B, h/i/C

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  • ronnica
    January 19

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    I was intrigued by the title, so alien to Lilac's colourful beauty. I see a poison pen or an angry Quill with a deadly message... Evil heart and mind


  • Meroza
    June 14, 2008
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    ooooh, me like!


  • maralisa silver member
    June 14, 2008

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    From the rhythm of my pulse
    penned in drops of blooded ink
    the dagger is my quill
    Your conception
    reflects repulsion
    penned in drops of blooded ink



    Embodiment of thought
    your death draws closer

    THE DAGGER IS MY QUILL!
    congrtulations on your well deserved shiny


  • wakingdevil
    March 8, 2008

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    What a beautiful, and thoughtful write in brevity...The ending was fantastic and the eccentric font just led to it's flavour!Very well deserving of the gold.Good luck


  • Shamanicmusings
    March 7, 2008
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    A bloodied trail of tears well spilt

    This is just brilliant well deserving of gold a stunning poem to match the picture.


  • animated lies
    March 7, 2008

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    Really neat, but I think the capitalization in the end is not necessary. Congratulations on the gold. Thank you for sharing this with the group.

    animated


    • -LilacThOughts- gold member
      March 7, 2008
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      Thanks for your comments animated, much appreciated

      The capitalization is purposely done, because of the emotion I was feeling when writing it...

      When read out aloud, I wanted to emphasize the fact that the voice should be raised louder on the last line...if you read it out aloud, you will feel the affect I wanted to achieve, especially when taking the picture into consideration as well...

      ~Lilac~


  • Lady Altheia
    March 6, 2008

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    Very cool, the ailen monster demon thing looks rather menancing. Congrats on the gold trophy. I saw this before but I didn't get a chance to read it.


  • tawk gold member
    March 6, 2008

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    What a powerful and very deep write my dear sister. It is so worthy of the Gold. Wonderful and amazing imagery and emotion. Just amazing


  • ronnica
    March 5, 2008
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    Your sense of colour is always awesome, even when dark, The togetherness with that and the expression
    of the poem are well done as always


  • Polaja Greeters member
    March 4, 2008

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    This was definitely deserving of the gold... I really like the way you used form poetry and word restriction together to create such a horror-ific poem and alliteration - I love alliteration thank you for sharing

    Keep writing

    Polly


  • LadyDementia gold member
    March 4, 2008

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    Wicked piece. I like it a lot Best of luck in the contest with it


  • ShelleyA
    March 4, 2008

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    Good title and interpretation of picture prompt. Eerie and dark. Very good form. I'm not familiar with the cascade, but it is creative and I like it. Good imagery, flow and tone. Deep expression of emotion. Good descriptives, word choice, alliteration and assonance. Thank you for your entry.


  • Rita Krocha
    March 4, 2008

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    I don't usually enjoy dark writes all that much but coming from you, it's really good one~


  • RatherImaginative silver member
    March 3, 2008

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    Yikes, kind of a freaky write, and yet it can be taken differently on so many levels. It was perhaps not your intention, but with the dagger being a quill, maybe the beast is writer's block, or some other obstacle to writing one might face. I like that the poem doesn't depend on the picture to make sense, which shows it was rather skillfully written indeed.


  • grannyeri gold member
    March 3, 2008

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    First time I have heard of this cascade form you mention in your author notes. A great write for this picture - liked the alliteration in these lines. Impressive presentation - coloring, and poem.


  • The Hermit
    March 3, 2008
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    Very creative on all fronts.


  • MysticalRayne
    March 3, 2008

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    Loved where you took this very creative... best of luck in the contest


  • FifthDove gold member
    March 2, 2008

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    Well this is a bit spooky in a grand way
    I found myself slowing down while reading to get the most out of it. Nice work sista Best wishes always

  • Moon Shadow
    March 2, 2008

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    Scary

    This is scary Lilac,I've not visited your page or read any of you work for sometime.The moment I come back to do so,I'm presented with this chilling write.It kept drawing me back to read again and again,so it certainly gripped me.Brilliantly written, so nothing has changed in my absence.Good luck in the contest.Take care Moon Shadow.


  • PageTurner
    March 2, 2008

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    Mesmerizing...



    I found this captivating and exhilarating.
    A sure winner, my Friend.


    Impressive, Poet!


    ~ Nicky♥


  • Desire gold member
    March 2, 2008

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    Wow!!

    Wonderful weaving of words in a form I have yet to try
    Beautifully presented~
    with Powerful message...
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • StarEyes
    March 2, 2008

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    This sent chills through me this morning Sis. Been a long time since you wrote anything, and what a come back this one was...

    Great job on this one!!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta

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