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Frail Fiery Beauty

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“Like a phoenix she triumphantly rose

after slowly dying by degrees.”

 

Hovering just above hell

and painful ruin,

fluttering,

 

struggling like a

dazzling butterfly

in hot fervent wind,

 

she was tormented by

thoughts kept in sweet silence,

bidding her to scream

 

as her spirit’s random fury

counted the days

until darkness, then

 

hope appeared

like a ray of sunshine

through dark clouds

 

dispelling certain fear,

caressing delicate

cold sensitivities, and

 

suddenly life became

vibrant and lovely as

a shining auburn sunrise~

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Pure Thought silver member
    September 6
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    congrats on your silver

    This is a wonderfully written poem for and about Allie.

    Buddy


  • Emmyb gold member
    March 14
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    oh! this was a surprise!

    a lovely tribute to auburn sunrise

    *slightly jealous*

    :-)


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    May 1, 2008

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    I have to come back and read this, ever so often, just to remember to smile.

    Thank you!!!
    You know - you are an amazing poet!


  • zt
    March 18, 2008

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    This was a very nice piece and certainly captured the essence of the phoenix and the judge. I liked the images you used and the way you tied her to the ending. Well done! Congratulations on the Silver.

    p.s. Did you mean "bidding" in S3L3?

  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    March 2, 2008
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    Awwww Michael!!!!

    This brought tears to my eyes! It was so beautiful and inspiring, and so true to who I am.
    You know me so well.

    I especially love the fourth stanza:

    "as she lamented her spirit's
    random fury, counting
    the days until darkness"

    because it is probably the best description I've ever read of bipolar disorder, and the uncertainty that I deal with day to day.

    I am fascinated, impressed, honored, flattered, and absolutely in love with this poem!

    You are such a wonderful friend and poet!!! Seriously, I'm still tearing up - and smiling at the same time!

    Thank you!!!


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    March 2, 2008

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    this is a truly wonderfulw rite daddy your words create such life to the image and it i a truly beautiful dedication well done daddy


  • Amera gold member
    March 2, 2008

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    This is great! A wonderful dedication to a wonderful person. She has become my friend as well and I am so glad to see this beautiful poem written for her. Thank you for the smile.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Sandygram
    March 2, 2008

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    You have penned a lovely poem about a lovely poetess. Your words are very heartfelt. Beautiful imagery to describe her. Best of luck in the contest. You take care3, Sandy

  • ashjoe76
    March 2, 2008

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    :)

    and


    suddenly life became

    vibrant and lovely as

    a shining auburn sunrise

    Truly uplifting MJ - could hold true for anyone.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    March 2, 2008

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    Aww that's lovely!!!! What a beautiful poem for her I'm sure she will love it!!

    Your words touched my soul even, so I know how much more they will mean for the person they are written for.



  • Margaret Denham gold member
    March 2, 2008

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    A beautifully expressed tribute to your sister.



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