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the words; biting angry twist.
i stare down the hole and wonder if it's the end,
five fingers and a rip in my dress.
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you stood, poised, ready.
i clutched my arms in my hands,
["simple, slutty, you're all the same."]
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i want no more words from you.
the stinging behind my eyes tells me it's for real,
and i leave parts of you still burning my knees.
Author notes
i don't know. :/
i hope it's 49 or less.
if it's more, and it's a problem, tell me?
A contest entry
- he says I'm not sorry and turns away. by sweetpearl.
388 points, ended March 3, 2008, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
we all get a little angry sometimes
Comments
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i love how you broke this up. the ending was powerful. i love this.
ily.<3
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it's 49 or less if you don't count the small words, which I normally do for poetry but I'll let it slide 'cause I can.
First part, third line - love. I really liked the third part to this though, it has real impact ont he piece and it's strong. I like the idea of it all as well. Great
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i really like this, i think it's aweosme, love the way you put it into three parts =)
great job and good luck in the contest!
stephanie =) -
you are amazing.
so sad lovie...
"i want no more words from you.
the stinging behind my eyes tells me it's for real,
and i leave parts of you still burning my knees."
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