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Starlight Spirits Symphony

Galactic worlds of cosmic extensions,
starlight sirens co-linear surreal
geometric torus plane dimensions
spinning heavens harmonic wheel.

Coplanar axis sanctuary accords
playing revolutions congruent chords
composite angels stellar symphonies
spirits light resplendent epiphany's.

 

  

Author notes

Heroic Rispetto   written in iambic pentameter, (10 syllable lines , 5 metric feet)
rhyme scheme is ABAB CCDD


Colinear is correctly spelled


Prompt: Quote~~
". . . Upon each of its circles stood a siren who was carried round
with its movements, uttering the concords of a single scale."
[Plato's Republic p. 354 Myth of Er]."~~along with the image
and a minimum of six words from the wordbank below

Wordbank: (must use at least six)
ANGLE, AMBIGUOUS, ARC, COLINEAR, CONGRUENT,
COMPOSITE, DIMENSION, EDGE, EXTREMES, FINITE,
HIERARCHY, LOCUS, MEDIAN, OBLIQUE, ORIENTATION,
PIXEL, PRIME, REVOLUTION, SLIDE, TORUS

Image Entitled "Geometry"
~Photo artist unknown at this time~

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  • Cupcrazy gold member
    May 5, 2008

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    A beautiful write, excellent form and flow. Impeccable rhythm and impressive verbiage, a delight of an entry. Hugs, Bunny

  • piccola silver member
    April 11, 2008

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    wonderful use of form and rhyme. I never understand metric feet and all that, but this seems a great job and I enjoyed the read.


  • Ithica silver member
    March 5, 2008

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    This seems like a tough form to use for the topic. And you have done it with ease. With the wordbank and rhyme scheme you have created a very complimetery piece for the prompts... Nicely done! Ithica


  • Blue Rew silver member
    March 4, 2008

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    Rispetto is one of my favorite forms, and this one
    seems to fit itself extremely well to the quote.
    I love the language and as mentioned above, the
    way you've managed to echo the beautiful quote
    from Plato. Well-done!! Blue


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    March 4, 2008

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    I absolutely adore Rispetto. You have penned well to this form with wonderful use of the word bank. Best of luck in the contest with this gem. I enjoyed this very much. ~Pamela

  • Seeking Peace silver member
    March 2, 2008

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    This is beautiful, you did a beautiful rendition of iambic pentamenter... just gorgeous with imagery and sensuality... goodluck in the contest

    Karen


  • Commodore Rouge
    March 2, 2008

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    Wow, good thing I just happened to read the featured box today! I love the word choice, that's some powerful vocab! I'm not sure about picture, though. It didn't really make a connection for me. Thanks for sharing something so precious!

  • Zyskandar A Jaimot
    March 2, 2008

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    good luck in the contest good rendition of 'iambic pentameter' good title excellent intro lines very strong ending thanks for sharing with us this 'classic' way of conversing/thought regards zaj

  • chiefmac
    March 2, 2008

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    Rhyme and rhythm move quickly, excellent use of word prompts. The reader is drawn in with the narrator and movement from the work.


  • frownsnfreckles
    March 2, 2008

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    I admire the fact you have interwoven the word bank to make sense and yet keep it condensed within a controlled form, fitting the subject matter. The rhyme and meter are excellent. Well done and good luck


  • grannyeri gold member
    March 2, 2008
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    Words banks often have such unusual and different words that you try to incorporate into a poem and have it makes sense. This is quite amazing how you have taken this group of words and used them in this poem. Amazing how math can be used in poetry. Awesome picture.

  • SueRee
    March 2, 2008

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    Good!

    The poem is a great two dimensional description of a three dimensional (at least) cosmos. I needed your quote line to connect the illustration to the poem, but she could easily fit the role for siren! Good luck in the contest.


  • dustookie2
    March 2, 2008

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    The title sets up an atmosphere which your introduction supports and entices the senses. I can read your lines the selection and use of language inter-woven with the word bank creating a brilliant poem Your talent as a poet has expanded hope this does well for you in the contest....

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