Seeping in slowly.
Healing pain.
Cracks in my defenses,
Of yesterday's forgotten sorrows.
Tears touch my lips,
Salty reminders.
Feelings, a knife on my chest.
Carve the canyon deeper.
Pain, past happiness.
Tears, dissolved laughter.
Numbness has no tomorrow;
Fill yesterdays canyon.
Numbness is now.
Author notes
Prompt: "The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain." ~ Kahlil Gibran.
A contest entry
- The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain. by Allyce May.
600 points, ended March 6, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Just tell me what you think.
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numbness - it grabs us all by the scruff of the enck sometimes and throws us into madness, all we can do is stare wildly, a good poem
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I can see the sorrow here, but it seems to be lacking in joy! It's evokes emotionally, but does not leave me feeling hopeful.
"Tears, dissolved laughter."
That bit was sad, left a pang.
Thanks for sharing
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I loved this!!! Every word perfectly placed and just...wow. One of the best pieces I've found on shameless, definitely the best I've read today.
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Wow, that's amazing! Though it wasn't very long, you drove a great and unique version of sorrow into my mind.
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Feelings, a knife on my chest.
I like that line, painful and a good imagery you have going with that =) true to many people I'm sure.
But I especially like the dissolved laughter line, beautiful ^-^
GREAT job
diggin it majorly
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Well written,very well indeed. It paints a vivid image of sadness in my mind. Keep it up ^_^
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awesome...just beautiful i loved it really sad....great job!
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I thought this was very well written, with alot of great imagery. Good luck in the contest.
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so goooooooood!
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