Ten hot days!
Getting exited when the fount
sprays on unsocked legs
Not minding at all
The gaze from neighbor's way
Until I recognize
I wore white shorts today
Of course I was amazed
when I tripped on skates
Straining an old sprain
Feet split straight both ways
Now a rip in the same place
Exposed and displayed
quickly ran away
And told my lady Jane
when asked to explain
"Just pretending you were with me
When it started to rain"
A contest entry
- For Touchof1der, to cheer her up ... by ecrivain01.
3350 points, ended March 4, 2008, 11 entries
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Honorable mention
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Haha, love the ending!
Good luck and thankyou for entering my contest. Also, thanks for making me laugh!
-heva
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lol - very humorous image there! But lovely ending to save the day!
Great wording, images and emotion in this. Very enjoyable.
Thank you for such a nice entry
best wishes
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hahaha i love the humor in this piece. i totally went to a pool party wearing white shorts one time. that could have been less embarassing.
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lol, good luck in the contest
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White shorts huh? Hmmm... that leaves much to the imagination.
I love the lightheartedness of this and the fact that you made me giggle as well as the closing lines about the rain. Laughter is a great healer. Thank you for entering this for me.
♥ Touchof1der -
Imaginative
when I first saw "unsocked" I thought you meant unsoaked, which both, I guess could have worked. But yours is much more imaginative. I like the way the poem reads- almost a sing-songy sort of rhythme, as if your lady Jane could have received this as a love song. Love the last line too. Brilliant.
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LOL ...
Well, I expect the lady will find this amusing. She has a good sense of humor.
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