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The Last Breathe

If i had a gun in my hand right now
and no one was near to hear my cries
would i choose to end it all
and just let my worries dissappear?

I could escape right now...
while there is still a glimspe of hope?
maybe then, i wont seem like such a dope...

If i pulled it now, and let it blow
would anyone dare to care?
or even wonder how?
I mean, they didn't before
i mean, i always came last...
becuase there were bills to pay
and work to do
money to get
things were too far
and there wasnt enough time
something had to go
and it just had to be me

If i pulled the trigger
i would feel no more pain
and have no more worry
about everyone else and their
bigger problems

If i did it now
it would all be no more
no more robbers or theives
no more deaths and no more grief
no more taunts and no more bullies
no more money to worry about
and no more listening to news
about all the destruction
no kids with guns at school
no people straving in the desert
or people shooting at their freinds
no more run aways
that just end up homeless

but if i did pull this trigger
and let this all become no more
wouldn't i just be another one
of those forgottent voices?
Just like whose who brought the gun to school?
or like those who cut, or worse...
shoot?
wouldn't i Just be like those
that left this world so full of pain
and that let everyone else deal with it.
Kinda like im running away.
wouldn't i just contribute
to the hate and pain
that haunts this world everyday?

No, i dont think i would pull that trigger at all.
i dont ever know why i have this gun at all...
it just creats hurt and pain
and nothing good ever came from that trigger.
what type of stupid person...
invented this at all?

Author notes

i wrote this last night when i couldnt sleep, and i swear, IM NOT SUICIDAL!! it just came to me, okay. and i finished typing this.

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  • Brandon Ashley
    March 31, 2008

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    lol that was really good at first i didn't know what you meant when you were saying that "there would be no more" and then i realized that the people would not be focusing on the hassels of every day life but on the death of the writer (if i'm not right please tell me). anyways..you put an extra T on the end of forgotten in the 6th paragraph. i like how you shot down the idea of shooting yourself..i really think thats a bad way to deal with problems myself. good write


  • livia michelle
    March 2, 2008

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    Wow....stellar.
    I'm glad these aren't your real feelings
    If you killed yourself a lot of people would be crushed.
    Great poem


  • Simsboy
    March 1, 2008
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    If ya ever need to talk, do not be afraid to, k? I dunno wanna loose a member of the Ap family


  • Musical Renaissance
    March 1, 2008

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    I liked it, despite it resembling a dark outlook on life. Also, I believe you meant 'Breath' in the title, not 'Breathe,' which is a verb, and not a noun. Now that you've had your grammar lesson for the day.... Great Write, and can't wait for the rest.

    [xX] Dawn [Xx]


  • photay.poetry
    March 1, 2008
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    it seems bad right now, but it has a happy end. i jst need to type it. g2g

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